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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
another intriguing installment.
so basically, most of narcissa\'s outstanding problems are wiped away with lucius\' suicide by auror. she no longer needs to worry about him trying to regain control over her, and if she cared at all about draco (hopefully not), he is taken care of since he inherits everything. obviously it is the lack of sorrow on her part and harry\'s complete lack of interest that triggered dumbledore\'s concern over harry becoming dark. no matter how \"real\" the display in the alley, snape could not have convinced dumbledore to test harry unless he had started wonder himself.
speaking of the public displays, i loved the fact that once again draco runs across his mother being sexually used. this time in a public setting, and by cloaked strangers. his response is fairly hilarious. i do wonder, since the next scheduled displays will occur during the school year, what will draco do then? i mean his mother must be recognizable to at least some of his classmates. and will the demonstrations always \"star\" narcissa? or will bella take center-stage? the reason i ask is, if they are trying to fake out voldemort, he knows that bella wouldn\'t necessarily mind the public humiliation.
as to the other members of the cast, i loved the interaction and development of tonks and hermione. tonks needs to show the world her devotion to her master, yet cannot. so she instead gets a tattoo. and she makes sure it is one that is guaranteed to make her master uncomfortable. i wonder why? hermione is definitely a person who would need to research every aspect of something. her discussion over the theory of apparation was a perfect touch. therefore her deal with tonks to practice her technique prior to asking harry was completely in character. as was their bedside conversation the next morning. i also like how the three thralls have started referring to hermione as their mistress. with their feedback link to their master, that tells the reader harry\'s actual feelings towards hermione, without slowing the story down.
i truly love this story because there is a true character development and interaction. the characters grow and adapt, yet remain true
chris
so basically, most of narcissa\'s outstanding problems are wiped away with lucius\' suicide by auror. she no longer needs to worry about him trying to regain control over her, and if she cared at all about draco (hopefully not), he is taken care of since he inherits everything. obviously it is the lack of sorrow on her part and harry\'s complete lack of interest that triggered dumbledore\'s concern over harry becoming dark. no matter how \"real\" the display in the alley, snape could not have convinced dumbledore to test harry unless he had started wonder himself.
speaking of the public displays, i loved the fact that once again draco runs across his mother being sexually used. this time in a public setting, and by cloaked strangers. his response is fairly hilarious. i do wonder, since the next scheduled displays will occur during the school year, what will draco do then? i mean his mother must be recognizable to at least some of his classmates. and will the demonstrations always \"star\" narcissa? or will bella take center-stage? the reason i ask is, if they are trying to fake out voldemort, he knows that bella wouldn\'t necessarily mind the public humiliation.
as to the other members of the cast, i loved the interaction and development of tonks and hermione. tonks needs to show the world her devotion to her master, yet cannot. so she instead gets a tattoo. and she makes sure it is one that is guaranteed to make her master uncomfortable. i wonder why? hermione is definitely a person who would need to research every aspect of something. her discussion over the theory of apparation was a perfect touch. therefore her deal with tonks to practice her technique prior to asking harry was completely in character. as was their bedside conversation the next morning. i also like how the three thralls have started referring to hermione as their mistress. with their feedback link to their master, that tells the reader harry\'s actual feelings towards hermione, without slowing the story down.
i truly love this story because there is a true character development and interaction. the characters grow and adapt, yet remain true
chris
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great work! I\'m beginning to wonder what will happen at Hogwarts. The possibilities...
Write more!
Write more!
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful story. I\'m usually too lazy to review what I read, but the scen with Draco in chapter 14 was just too funny to not remark on. Please continue this story as it\'s one of the bright spots of my day if i see it has been updated.
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YAY!
you finally updated!!!!
*does happy dance*
yayayayayayayyayayayayayayayayayayayay!!!!!
can\'t wait til the next chapter.....
please type quickly!
you finally updated!!!!
*does happy dance*
yayayayayayayyayayayayayayayayayayayay!!!!!
can\'t wait til the next chapter.....
please type quickly!
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May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked how you had Draco passed out when he saw what was happening to his Mother.
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May 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very, very hot, and interesting.
Good plot, cool characterizations.
More soon, please.
Good plot, cool characterizations.
More soon, please.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great!
\"... look like a blond-bimbo
\"... look like a blond-bimbo
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May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LMFAO *falls over laughing* loved the ending of the new chapter, loved it loved it loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
oh I can\'t wait for more.
it may not be perfect, but nothing is....but it\'s damned close and to anyone that says other wise....\"go to hell, or abi in malam rem!\"
Trying patiently to await your next chapter.
oh I can\'t wait for more.
it may not be perfect, but nothing is....but it\'s damned close and to anyone that says other wise....\"go to hell, or abi in malam rem!\"
Trying patiently to await your next chapter.
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May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so harry\'s punishment of narcissa is extremely public? i can see where that would be very humiliating. i like how harry knew that bella was trying to use the situation to her advantage, so harry ended up adding her to the punishment rolls.
using tonks\'s abilities to vent any frustrations over harry\'s upbringing was.. interesting. personally, i hope he has gotten that need out of his system. although, i have to wonder why he did not pick up on hermione\'s actions during tonks\'s demonstration, nor his thrall\'s obvious knowledge of her needs/wants when she decided to go along with them for narcissa\'s punishment. i was afraid that you were going to stretch out hermione\'s confrontation with her emotions regarding harry for another chapter. so i was surprised that she approached harry immediately following the day\'s actions. it was an interesting change that harry slept with hermione rather than cocooned by his thralls. although his confusion upon waking, with the lack of early morning memory, was perfect. i liked his panic and yet i thought his response to hermione\'s kiss on the cheek to be fairly telling.
as to the foreshadowing -- with voldemort hoping that the sisters black will be able to pervert harry over to the dark side, i would almost be afraid for harry. he has never been one to seek attention, yet now, in order to help the fight against voldemort and support snape\'s spying, he will have to publicly debase women he has come to care for (it would appear). i assume that the public punishments would only include the sisters black -- does voldemort (or anybody else) know that tonks has been made a thrall as well?
anyway, i have been enjoying this story very much, so thank you for the updates
chris
using tonks\'s abilities to vent any frustrations over harry\'s upbringing was.. interesting. personally, i hope he has gotten that need out of his system. although, i have to wonder why he did not pick up on hermione\'s actions during tonks\'s demonstration, nor his thrall\'s obvious knowledge of her needs/wants when she decided to go along with them for narcissa\'s punishment. i was afraid that you were going to stretch out hermione\'s confrontation with her emotions regarding harry for another chapter. so i was surprised that she approached harry immediately following the day\'s actions. it was an interesting change that harry slept with hermione rather than cocooned by his thralls. although his confusion upon waking, with the lack of early morning memory, was perfect. i liked his panic and yet i thought his response to hermione\'s kiss on the cheek to be fairly telling.
as to the foreshadowing -- with voldemort hoping that the sisters black will be able to pervert harry over to the dark side, i would almost be afraid for harry. he has never been one to seek attention, yet now, in order to help the fight against voldemort and support snape\'s spying, he will have to publicly debase women he has come to care for (it would appear). i assume that the public punishments would only include the sisters black -- does voldemort (or anybody else) know that tonks has been made a thrall as well?
anyway, i have been enjoying this story very much, so thank you for the updates
chris
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May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great chapter cant wait for the next