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June 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excellent! The Ron-Luna stuff was great! Wonder who else will get to enjoy themselves inside Harry\'s qarters.
Write more!
Write more!
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June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
GAH -- that would be a bit disturbing. I mean, no matter how open minded you are, getting a photograph (even if it wasn\'t a wizarding type) of one\'s mother display her affection for a butt-plug would be more earth-shattering than finding out that Sirius enjoyed being a dominant partner. Yes, he never knew his parents and he is still discovering that a more active sex life does not equate deviancy, but his reaction in comparison to his earlier eruptions seems to be way too subdued. I could chalk it up to being in shock. But, if so, his comment about leaving the picture as a gift to Ron is really odd. And if his reaction is subdued because of an overload, that would mean he will have to face his real feelings regarding his idolized image of his parents\' relationship with the newly discovered facts soon.
Outside of this plot point, I liked how the thralls are worried about Harry not taking command. I found it interesting that Tonks pushed Harry over the edge to the point that he started to spank her, yet she did not listen to what he was saying at the time. Hermione reinforced what Harry was saying at that point -- Harry is really not good at planning; he is good at reacting to situations. I truly liked the fact that the thralls are keyed into Harry\'s mind and emotions, yet it was Hermione who was the one to actually understand him.
The showcasing of Luna and Ron and their blossoming relationship was an interesting change. I found it interesting that even though Luna may be the submissive partner in name, the couple truly are a partnership. She makes some of the decisions for the pair (as seen by the manipulations of Millicent and to arrange the \"punishment\") and Ron truly loves and cares for her. I found it endearing to see the pair exploring their boundaries and knowing that they would not betray the trust each has in the others control.
As to the future chapters, now that Harry has been given an idea of what his thralls are needing, I expect we will see more pseudo-public scenes with Narcissa. Perhaps to the point of truly being public? Although, with Harry being such a private individual, I cannot really accept him doing so at this point. Tonks will try and get Harry to do more role playing -- but I wonder what roles would be played first? And will Harry be able to learn to give pain to Bella, or will he have to delegate that job in the beginning?
I also would expect to see a little into Ginny and Neville and their situation. They are bonding nicely, I would assume. But they have been faced with the planned punishment of Bella; did that affect them at all.
As for Hermione: obviously Remus\' comment regarding Lily\'s need to have control taken away from her and given to her partner (James) was an allegory for Hermione and her earlier out-of-character referral to Harry as \"Master\". Unfortunately, if you do take her character this way, my opinion is that it would be a big mistake. My feelings for this are based on two points. The first is the stereotype of a control personality needs or wants to be controlled at some point in their life, usually in a sexual situation. I have never come across this situation outside of stories. I know quite a few people who fall into this category and none of them feel the desire to be a submissive in a relationship. Secondly, and more importantly to this story, Harry NEEDS an equal. Right now, Harry is surrounded by thralls and retainers. These people by definition MUST follow his every whim and desire. For a person so afraid of becoming \"dark\" that is a very bad thing. Hermione is the only person who has shown any insight to his true inner personality (as seen in this chapter for example). The minute that she would act the slightest bit submissive to Harry, he would have to suspect any and all advice from her. Harry would never know if she is giving advice that is needed or what she thinks he \"wants\" to hear.
So far this story has avoided becoming completely cliched. I hope it continues to do so
Chris
Outside of this plot point, I liked how the thralls are worried about Harry not taking command. I found it interesting that Tonks pushed Harry over the edge to the point that he started to spank her, yet she did not listen to what he was saying at the time. Hermione reinforced what Harry was saying at that point -- Harry is really not good at planning; he is good at reacting to situations. I truly liked the fact that the thralls are keyed into Harry\'s mind and emotions, yet it was Hermione who was the one to actually understand him.
The showcasing of Luna and Ron and their blossoming relationship was an interesting change. I found it interesting that even though Luna may be the submissive partner in name, the couple truly are a partnership. She makes some of the decisions for the pair (as seen by the manipulations of Millicent and to arrange the \"punishment\") and Ron truly loves and cares for her. I found it endearing to see the pair exploring their boundaries and knowing that they would not betray the trust each has in the others control.
As to the future chapters, now that Harry has been given an idea of what his thralls are needing, I expect we will see more pseudo-public scenes with Narcissa. Perhaps to the point of truly being public? Although, with Harry being such a private individual, I cannot really accept him doing so at this point. Tonks will try and get Harry to do more role playing -- but I wonder what roles would be played first? And will Harry be able to learn to give pain to Bella, or will he have to delegate that job in the beginning?
I also would expect to see a little into Ginny and Neville and their situation. They are bonding nicely, I would assume. But they have been faced with the planned punishment of Bella; did that affect them at all.
As for Hermione: obviously Remus\' comment regarding Lily\'s need to have control taken away from her and given to her partner (James) was an allegory for Hermione and her earlier out-of-character referral to Harry as \"Master\". Unfortunately, if you do take her character this way, my opinion is that it would be a big mistake. My feelings for this are based on two points. The first is the stereotype of a control personality needs or wants to be controlled at some point in their life, usually in a sexual situation. I have never come across this situation outside of stories. I know quite a few people who fall into this category and none of them feel the desire to be a submissive in a relationship. Secondly, and more importantly to this story, Harry NEEDS an equal. Right now, Harry is surrounded by thralls and retainers. These people by definition MUST follow his every whim and desire. For a person so afraid of becoming \"dark\" that is a very bad thing. Hermione is the only person who has shown any insight to his true inner personality (as seen in this chapter for example). The minute that she would act the slightest bit submissive to Harry, he would have to suspect any and all advice from her. Harry would never know if she is giving advice that is needed or what she thinks he \"wants\" to hear.
So far this story has avoided becoming completely cliched. I hope it continues to do so
Chris
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June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn! This story is crazy man...I cannot stop reading and laughing so very hard at poor Harry and his \"court.\" So when is Tonks going to tell Harry she is pregnant? Will Cho become a slave? Will Harry become a true Master? So many questions and I hope they get answered as this wild tale unfolds.
Heck, I want to know what happens years after Voldemort is defeated...
Heck, I want to know what happens years after Voldemort is defeated...
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June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very, very hot, interesting part.
Millicent surprised me, but somehow, James and Lily didn\'t.
Where\'s Cho during all this?
More soon, please.
Millicent surprised me, but somehow, James and Lily didn\'t.
Where\'s Cho during all this?
More soon, please.
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June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice. I really liked seeing the Ron and Luna in there. It was nice to see somebody besides Harry, slaves, and girlfriend. Keep up the excellent work, and remember to conquer the world once you\'re done.
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June 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, long chapter, but only more great writing to admire and read so thats good. i dont like how harry only plays a major role half the chapter, especially in one so long. i see you are shifting views to ron\'s/luna\'s in teh second half, though i do not dislike this change, i still say harry would be more interesting that ron, seeing as how we know so much about harry already, to start on another character so much will blur focus. otherwise great writing. cant wait to see tonks fantasies (i cant spell) get played out. and the surprise will keep me awake at night pondering as to what it might be. i want to see luna get in trouble again though, and answer to harry this time. harsher punishment sounds fun to me.
ps. i thought milliecent bulstrode was ugly in the movies, wasnt she? not sure if i remember her correctly, please someone reply to me if she is hot or not, i cant form a clear character image of her while i read.
ps. i thought milliecent bulstrode was ugly in the movies, wasnt she? not sure if i remember her correctly, please someone reply to me if she is hot or not, i cant form a clear character image of her while i read.
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June 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked the sex scenes in the libraray.
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June 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update. We want update! And we command better reviews than the one we just gave!
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June 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good chapter but I don
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June 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another wonderful chapter... Awesome... Took a bit longer for you to get it out than what I have started to become accustomed to... but the chapter was long so i guess its not so bad.... Awesome story keep up the good work