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While I was hoping that the buggering scene between Harry and Hermione would finally take pla, it seems that we will at least see it soon. I am guessing that you are going to have Hermione\'s Father to ask, more like promt, Harry to bugger Hermione on her behalf. Maybe you came make the scenes more explicit, since most of the scenes nowadays are no longer as vivid as before. Can I suggest that the event take place at some home Harry buys, say somewhere in the mediterranean, with a beach on his property. Nobody but Harry and Hermione, and maybe the Black sisters. I absolutely love the scenes where you have Harry treat Pansy like a dog, she needs her ego to go down. Although,it seems like Harry\'s friends are taking advantage of his thralls, I though only he, and Hermione because of their love, would be allowed to command them. Hopefully you can have Harry finally cast the first wife her, jinx, whatever it is.

Hey, That chapter was... umm... interesting?... it was good but interesting in a weird sort of way... I look forward to the next chapter and hope harry and/or hermione makes a move soon... Harry casting the first wife spell would be a nice touch but they arent quite there yet... btw... whatever happened to/with Draco... and i would really like to see a bit more of a return to some classes perhaps DADA or potions... i know harry knows all the stuff but given that it is currently the school year harry is doing an awful lot but i think it just seems that way because he isnt \"attending\" classes in the sense we dont see him attend... therefore the stuff harry is doing just seems like alot even when you try to explain it by saying the rest of the week or by saying the day before the actions occur because the actions have no baseline to tie them together with time...

You\'ve got to be kidding me. The whole incest thing with the Blacks was a lil\' over board but was cool since they\'re all hot and all, but you really could have done this without his aunt suckin\' him off. That had no foundation, except you put that lil crack that he fantasized about his \"skinny, horsed face aunt who was horrible to him for many years\"

Honestly, how is that a turn on? Jeez. Well if writing about people getting blowed by their aunts gets you off, who am I to say thats its weird?

I think imma puke. A little warning would have been nice. I dont know how people can enjoy reading, let alone writing about harry getting blowed by petunia, but thats some twisted stuff. Um, why did you write that? I mean.. really, what sort of motivation are you deriving this from? Petunia, PETUNIA, whom we\'ve only heard bad things about and yet you have Harry letting his aunt suck him off? He has no respect at all for his relatives and... wow... thats just so out of character its almost funny.

Meh. whatever rocks your boat man.

Well, I kept reading, just cause i wanted to know why the hell you did that. and the only reason i see is because petunia is mind numbingly desperate. Harry has been violated. I\'m wondering why he didn\'t keel over and throw up right away but apparantly you\'re feeding me this bull that he finds her attractive. Thats so ew I can\'t think straight. Tonks transforming into harry... Kinky but pretty funny.

I really wonder what you\'re smoking when you wrote THIS chapter. I dont think, seeing how protective harry is, that he\'d EVER allow ANYONE to touch any of this \"thralls\" To just accept a blowjob from a complete stranger was so utterly stupid... How is that punishment? Thats more like whoring her out, thats friggen basically what he did, he whored her out. Like some... harlot off the street. So it was her fault that Petunia was a desperate woman and harry has no self control to stop the blowjob from happening? Gosh... So many sick ass things in this story... It was doing okay till the petunia ordeal .. now your just being weird. You\'ve leveled yourself to all those disgusting people who write about the twins together or ginnny/ron. Gawd.. Some people... AND OH GAWD.. why would he act out the pentunia/tonks scene with tonks as his aunt? Are their really that many weirdos out there that can enjoy all this sick perverted crap in this story?

Shiat.. what\'s this world coming to? This.. sick feeling in my stomache just wont go away.. Damn.. why didn\'t I stop reading RIGHT at the moment where petunia sucked harry... Gosh.. I gotta learn to trust my instincts.

Anyway, putting that aside I guess this is an okay story. Harry\'s dialogue is utterly horrible, some of your plot ideas are really lame, but other than that you\'ve got a descent thing going. I was thinking that by the 13th chapter your skill at writing sex scenes would have at least gotten a little better, but some of them are still a little dry. Most of the time its something like \"bella bounced in his lap and harry comes\" Its getting better.. but i aint stickin around to find out. I dont want anymore of my dinner on the floor.

It WAS a good read. ..was..pity you just had to butcher it so many times.

later

I dont understand why no one wants to actually critique you. Everything is like nothing but praise. For one, Hermione to just STAND there and watch while Harry proceeds to spank Bella was really awkward if not stupid. I doubt would be anyone *unless they\'re kinky as hell* that would just watch that and not say anything. I know how everyone seems to be a Herm/harry fanatic especially after book 5, from one stinkin kiss, but really now?

Why would snape be really affected by what he saw in Harry\'s childhood? With all the ocl sessions from before, he must have seen everything already I always believed Snape was just that much of an ass and didn\'t say anything about it, even going as far as to compete with him by just LEAVING the stupid pensive when he knows Harry is coming. C\'mon, that was pretty lame if you stop to think about it.

Anyway, its still a cool story even if some things are just.. crappily done, but thank you for fighting the damn slash/yaoi/shonen ai crap going around adultfan. Those bug me terribly.

Explain how a simple witches oath turns Mione into a slave? Gimmi some anzwerz!

Harry really is an oddball in this. Normally, like in the book and such, to make a main character they would take one attribute and greatly emphasize it to make that character\'s \"character\" stick. Hermione has the role of nerdy/bossy. Harry is always blunt/simple minded. ECT.

But in here he\'s a whirlwind of friggin things. To raging furious at his thralls, to weeping on them, comforting THEM, blushes far to easily even though he\'s done the horizontal pokey numerious times.. its a bit annoying but funny. Its like he\'s a skitso. Hahah!

Is just me, or is chapter one cut off and then chapter two just bugs off to something different? What the hell happened in between 1 and 2?