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This is pretty good man. I'm a member of your PoT group (where's my PoT fix by the way?) and this is a complete change of direction. A very good detour though. I read a lot of erotic stuff mainly because i've read almost everything else and this has to be among the top 7 and a half that i've read. It'd be number one but the truly smutty stuff (ha ha, smutty) isn't here yet. Nice job on getting Harry hot then cooling him off real quick. Oh and the teasingly small amounts of flesh he's seen, just great. Keep up the good work and keep the updates as quick as they have been. Mabey you should updat PoT as quick as this?.... but I doubt you could do that. Cya around.

Dustin Woodcock

I have just read your story. I actually come from your yahoo group. And i liked it very much. It is one of the best pieces of smut or erotic stuff, that i have read.
schkuro

Years ago, I saw a sketch done by Hal Foster, creator of Prince Valiant, for a convention magazine. The sketch showed Foster glaring at Valiant, who rec reclining on a divan while a bevy of attractive, scantily clad girls plied him with food and drink. Val was raising his goblet to his creator and saying, "Foster, I've had enough of being the hero, put a little pleasant sin in my life!" This fic reminds me of that; Harry's had years of Murphy's less than affectionate attention, time he caught a break or two or three of four...and who knows, his connection might give Moldieshorts a terminal migraine from teenage hormonal overload...can't wait to read the rest!

Hi there,

I hardly ever write a review for a fanfiction story but I felt that this story warranted such attention. I have to say this is one of the better stories of this genre I have read in a long time. The way you describe the scene in the 3rd chapter from all the different viewpoints was done very well and flowed naturally in my opinion. If the rest of the story is anything like what is already written, you can be sure I will keep reading it.

this is a pretty cool idea. i liked how it was an accident and harry didn't mean to be trapped in the room, although i wonder how he got up to the girl's dorm in the first place. the fact that he is locked in is every boy's fantasy. i know it's mine. hehe. i think you have hermione's character pretty good. a little uptight, a little more bossy but still sweet. i like her. lavender and parvati are interesting. i like the little back story of them experimenting. i guess with a situation like this you have to have most of the girls bisexual or curious at least, so that explains ginny. growing up with six older brothers would make her crave some female friends and maybe even 'appreciation' of them. anyway, i'm overanalyzing all this. let me finish up by saying i can't wait for the next chapter. good work!

first of all lets just say tank you, finally a real story on this site that isnt slash or starts with everyone screwing everyone, second of all I was just wondering if this harry is the onem pom power of time or a harry from some other story line.

Well I can honestly tell say that you managed to make my toes curl. As I am sure has been said over and over and over again, I don

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What on earth is a good* author doing on AFF? This is the site for massive out of character behaviour, strange werid perversions, slash by the bucket load, and abusive relationships.

The only slight complaint that I have is that you jump perspectives a lot, and while it does show what each character is feeling, it kinda irritates me. (not that I expect you to change just because of that ;))

So, it's nice to find the occasional nugget in the dank of this site.


* - good meaning someone who understands plot, pace, dialogue, charecterisations, believability, spelling and puncutation.

WOW! Great job with this story! Please update soon, and hopefully you can write a masturbation or shower scene too?