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A pretty good read, though some of the earlier paragraphs are a bit bulky. Also, it should be noted that boys cannot ascend the stairs to the girls' dormitories because it turns into a slide.

This is practically the only Ron/Hermione fic on here, and it's awesome to see. I hope more people will write Ron/Hermione from now on or at least start posting here. Nice and refreshing to see! Now, for the teensy problems: you have some spelling errors and a couple of things didn't quite seem right. When Hermione s Ros Ron he can lay on top of her and it won't hurt her, and when you said she was about a hundred pounds lighter than he. These sort of go together, so I'll just let you know what my thoughts are concerning that. My bf is about 150 pounds -- somewhere in there. If he lays on top of me, it takes just a minute to start feeling like I can't breathe very well. That's a lot of weight to have on your lungs! (they used to execute people that way, ya know -- by putting heavy stones on them till they suffocated). So I think that if Ron was THAT heavy -- I mean how much does Hermione weigh? She must be at least 100 pounds, which puts Ron at 200 pounds -- 50 pounds more than my bf. Man, that's GOT to hurt! Other than that it was pretty good. Simultaneous orgasms are few and far between, though. Esp. if she's a virgin. And there's something about anyone kissing anyone when they've just awakened that seems kind of yucky. morning breath and all. Your writing overall is good, though. Lots of wonderful potential! Just clean up the little loose ends like spelling and such. Good job for your first fic!

Holy mother of pete that was one amazing fic! I love how Lavender walked in on them and Hermiones response. ROFLOL

First fan fic???? Well PLEASE write MORE! This story was just precious!!!! It had just enough of everything!! Thanks for sharing it!

this was really good. very sweet with ron and hermione, which i don't usually see. it was kind of refreshing. it was a bit unrealistic to think that it would be so great their first time, especially when they were drunk, but it was sweet and loving. why though, was ron able to go up into the girl's dorm? boys aren't allowed up there. good story though. write another.