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November 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
My god this is...complete crap!
What's with all the songs? All the lame meaningless songs by crappy artists that have songs written for them becuase they don't have any talent to do it themselves!
Your chapters aren't even chapters...their paragraphs and not even that! The grammar and spacing is horrible! You take the time to space out the lyrics but not to work on your story, spacing, and grammar?
Ah the wonders of google and copying and pasting awful lyrics...
Of course this is just my own personal opinion totally meaningless to you...but still if your gonna post a story think it out, write a rough draft, get it proof read and then post.
What's with all the songs? All the lame meaningless songs by crappy artists that have songs written for them becuase they don't have any talent to do it themselves!
Your chapters aren't even chapters...their paragraphs and not even that! The grammar and spacing is horrible! You take the time to space out the lyrics but not to work on your story, spacing, and grammar?
Ah the wonders of google and copying and pasting awful lyrics...
Of course this is just my own personal opinion totally meaningless to you...but still if your gonna post a story think it out, write a rough draft, get it proof read and then post.
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October 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story was good. I think they should preform the act, since that is where it is seeming tad. ad.
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October 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
God, this sucks. Get a beta reader, please! And don't start every chapter with a song.