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Can't wait to read what happens next!

Oh, damn, I just had a thought: Voldemort wants Hermione, for her power (or some such), which is what Harry and Ron are not telling her. Harry and Ron are going to go off to meet Moldie right now (w/ /o t/o the Order members; it's a moot point). Probably both of them aren't coming back (or at least not Ron)... Hermione's gonna be in charge of killing Voldie, and now Charlie has a chance to be the one protecting/holding her... OK, so that randomly came to me, but I'm guessing I'm at least partially right... Guess I'll find out next chapter. ;)

Nice story! Really enjoying the twisting plot.

Sorry about your Nana. This chapter was good. I reread Chpt 9 b/c I thought I'd miss it's posting, but even though I read it the first time, reading it again helped me to refresh. ;) This is an interesting love triangle you have going on with Charlie and Herm and Ron... You even had Hermione say that Charlie found her soul (but Ron has her heart)... this is gonna get complicated, I can tell... The next chpt is darker? hmmm, Moldie-shorts is rearing his ugly head again, isn't he? Good luck with the next chapter. :)

btw, constructive criticism: You have to be 11 by Sept. 1 in order to start as a First Year at Hogwarts. Therefore, Hermione was 11 by the time she started, with Harry and Ron. If the "emergency Order meeting" happened approximately two weeks before school started, that would be mid-August, so chances are Hermione is already 17. (Since you said Ron is "of age" (i.e. 17), and it's past July 31, that means Harry has already had his 17th birthday as well... and I think I read somewhere that JKR said that Hermione's birthday in is (um, I believe) April (at least sometime in the spring)...) Either way, I think that Hermione is slightly older than Harry... which means that Hermione would be old enough to go to the Order meeting as well... Just thought that you might wanted to have included that, or acknowledge the confusion... You *could* make brief reference to a birthday party held for Hermione right before school... or you could just ignore me altogether. ;) lol... sorry, I'll stop telling you how to write your story. ;)

I'll be short and sweet. Story is still good...keep it up! And keep the chapters coming. ^_^

Please, please find a beta reader. It is impossible to enjoy a story with such rampant errors in spelling, grammar and word choice.

I love this story it's the bomb.
i think emma watson is a babe and picture her when i read your story.
as for the spelling it's not that bad and it's getting much better now.

this story kicks ass 10 out 10 for me

keep rocking the pen..........

I can't stop reading this story

keep up the good work your a gifted writer.

now i'nishnish kissing up i must ask any chance of seeing the twins get a go with Hermione just a thought

lol

The Immortal

What can I say about this story? Hmm..what a great story. I love how Ron and Herm int interact in this story and een the parts with Charlie are quite adorable. I'm now even starting to lean toward reading Charlie/Hermione fics, besides my Ron/Hermione obsession.

I've got to hand it to you, this is a really good story. I can't help but be drawn into the plot.