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December 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ch 7 - nice to see an update! Will Hermione ask Severus for help in getting the other items on her list? Or perhaps she could ask Snape to be her sister\'s guardian - he\'s old enough. I almost expected Hermione\'s sister to be a Parseltongue, as she got along well with Poe.
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December 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this is a good story!
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November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love the story but get very distracted by the spelling and grammatical errors. I have a feeling you are like me and have a really hard time motivating yourself to reread your own work. There are tons of great betas out there, take advantage of them, or at least look over it please. I think that the quality of the writing is superb, I look forward to reading more. Thanks!
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November 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Love this...cannot wait to see the coupling and the healing as well. oh, and the strenght between them all bonding. brilliant work here. on the personal side, love the ballet - am former sfballet student and still have ballet as a hobby. love stories where hermione dances (waiting for her to dance as several plays violin). Maybe she'll dance more in upcoming chapters? how will sev react? hopefully we'll see more soon?
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November 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story is incredible. I love how you write all your characters.
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November 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! Thank you for updating!!!! One chapter more incredible, heartfelt and beautifully written than the last. This is at the top of my favorite Fics list. This was just such a wonderful chapter I don't seem to have the words to do it justice. Absolutely amazing.
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November 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I don't know what to say about your story besides, the obvious... Update soon!
You're right, child abuse is more common than anyone realizes. Because people turn a blind eye to it, or don't recognize the symptoms, it goes unnoticed, untreated and unavenged until too late in most cases. I will be interested to read how the kids heal their wounds and the bit about Hermione being from a noble family is very fitting. Keep writing, and again... Update update update!!!
*Hugs*
You're right, child abuse is more common than anyone realizes. Because people turn a blind eye to it, or don't recognize the symptoms, it goes unnoticed, untreated and unavenged until too late in most cases. I will be interested to read how the kids heal their wounds and the bit about Hermione being from a noble family is very fitting. Keep writing, and again... Update update update!!!
*Hugs*
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November 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i really like this story i really want to know what happens next so plz update soon.
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October 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow.
-- You've got the stage set now for your story.
-- The abuse situations, I am very sad to say, are realistic. I am in the US and this happens.
-- Some minor spelling nits, Petunia Evans, apparate.
-- Love that Arianna can see auras.
-- What will be the impact of Hermione realizing she is not a true muggle? How will this impact her relationships with other muggleborn?
I like this story. Please keep writing.
-- You've got the stage set now for your story.
-- The abuse situations, I am very sad to say, are realistic. I am in the US and this happens.
-- Some minor spelling nits, Petunia Evans, apparate.
-- Love that Arianna can see auras.
-- What will be the impact of Hermione realizing she is not a true muggle? How will this impact her relationships with other muggleborn?
I like this story. Please keep writing.
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October 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
My friend, your plot line is wonderful, though dark. All five chapters so far are quite compelling. But you *really* need to get yourself a good beta if you don't have one already. The grammar mistakes that pepper the text take away from it's quality. Oh and check your "Potterverse" terms: it's *Apparate* (like apparition) *not* Aperate and the name was "Evans" not "Evens" to name a few.
Don't take this poorly, like I said you're writing a great plot, just get someone to clean up the text (grammar and conjuga), h), hmm?
Don't take this poorly, like I said you're writing a great plot, just get someone to clean up the text (grammar and conjuga), h), hmm?