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Hey! I just found your fanfic [I love RD fanfics] and I have a few comments. Draco is cheating on Ron with Percy isn\'t he? Cuz that time when Ron visited the Ministry, Percy was said to look tired and as if he just got his robes back on. Sounds like he had gone on a steamy rendenvous to me. And then it took Ron extra longer to get Draco hard again. Maybe because he was tired from getting off previously with his lover\'s brother? And omg, the clues are so obvious that he is cheating. And I really hate him for it. Because he is jealous of Ron\'s success? Or is he that lonely? And underestimates how important he is to Ron? I dunno, but I totally hate him for doing this to Ron? Though I guess Ron deserves it; Draco has been pratically calling out that their relationship is on the rocks for the past few weeks [in his body language] but Ron still failed to notice it because he\'s an insensitive brat. But who can blame him? He\'s been like that from day one! Draco should know that by now. And I guess he\'s mad that Ron doesn\'t spend as much time with him huh? And that he\'s higher rank than him? For treating him like a fuck toy? [I thought Ron was kinda being inconsiderate when he told Draco to lay in bed naked and just be ready and needy for him.] But I\'m sure Ron was just trying to put mood into it, though I don\'t think that\'s how Draco sees it. I wonder if Draco still loves him? Or is he bored with Ron, just like Lucius is with Hermione? And the ultimate question, did Draco ever love Ron? Or love him as much and as deep as Ron does?

Also, Ron doesn\'t seem to be as useful to Voldie now after the war isn\'t it? I mean, after the war, he\'s not longer useful to them. He is good at strategy, and that basically is useless in politics nowadayds now isn\'t it? I also thought Lucius was kinda mean to Ron in the last chapter. Is it because now that Ron is no longer of use to them anymore, he\'s being disrespectful to him? Was Lucius so fatherly loving towards Ron at the beginning only to gain his trust so that he would work for them?

Or am I thinking too much into this? Haha watever, great work so far. Update soon!

Wonderful story, one of the best FFs I

Great story idea, just one thing. READ THE FUCKING THING OVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The amount of errors I saw...... Nothing that big, but lots and lots of little errors. Just read it over and you should be fine. Great idea again, just work on your editing. Is 22 ch the end? You never said the end so I don\'t know.
Thorn

This is such a great fic! I love it, it is so original with Ron being a Deatheater. I can\'t wait to see what will happen

I love how you introduced Ron\'s predicament. His personality shows through, but it is not the same one he had as a child. He has gained reason, and while he is pissed as hell, he sees reason. Also the humor I have come to define as Ron is there. It will be interesting to watch the growing attraction between Ron and Draco.

Very good. Hope to see more soon.

I know this story was probably written quite a while ago, and you\'ve probabl stopped checking this page, but I just had to say, on the offchance, that I REALLY LOVE THIS STORY,
I mean, I like that RON/DRACO pairing, but I like it a billion times better, now I\'ve read this, I really like the story, and I really like what you\'ve done with the characters. It\'s amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Great fic! I really loved how you worked everyone out!

Wonderful job!

Whew. Love this fic. I first saw it at the Bottom!Draco Euporium about three months ago, and I have not been able to get it from my mind since. I am glad I decided to track this fic down (went from Lady Feylene at B!DE to Lady Feylene at ff.net to your livejournal, to your webpage, and finally to here), because I was beginning to think it ended with chapter nineteen at B!DE, and that would have been just -wrong.- But it did not, and I love it, probably a little more than I should - it is never good to become too dependent. So, yes, wonderful plot, and one of the -few- DeathEater!Ron fanfics that is believable.

There are a few typographical errors, and some grammar mistakes, but I think if you had someone beta for you, you could get rid of those rather quickly. The most frequent mistake I noticed was a misuse of then/than. You seemed to use one in the place of the other, and, since they have completely different meanings, it was throwing me off in some places. Some of your sentences could be phrased a little better to make it more understandable, but, again, I think this is something a beta could do for you. There were no horrible mistakes, though (you have a nice talent for writing!).

Characterization in this is amazing. Like I mentioned, Ron is completely believable, and Draco and Lucius are kept much in character. I like your version of Voldemort, as well. The only one I had a problem with was Harry, but even then I think you wrote him well (I only have that problem becaise I am bias against Harry, as he is a bastard).

I think what makes me so adoring of this fanfic is that I usually do not like to read long-fics since I get bored with them about halfway through, but this one kept my interest the entire time. It is so good! If you plan to continue it, then I will be checking in on it again, but if you decide not to I think you left it at a reasonable place. Honestly, you kind of brought up a few questions there at the end and made me wonder, but I think you should leave it here because the only conflict I can see happening now is another bickering between Draco and Ron and seeing as that conflict (as a major conflict) has already been created and resolved I think the story would loose its edge. So... yeah, unless you have a great new twist in mind that will shock us all, I think you will be fine if you choose to leave it here. ^^

Loved it! Hope to read more from you! -frosty^^

so they won!
and now the DE\'s are setting up government..
but i see you\'re not going to end it at that- Ron needs a bigger kick in the head-
Your Ron voice is just so right- his big, clueless, denseness.
and your snitty Draco- the part- (sorry about the bad paraphrasing)-
*he\'ll say something like \"I was eaten by a HIppogriff\" just to come up with something more important than me*
was so Draco.
please update.