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for Instincts Awakened

by Risisika

person Kerwyn
schedule September 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
He he he...u r totally screwed up! I like it though! You like to add alot of detail too, and sumtimes it takes away from the plot, but i like it....You need more dialoge too *by the way* Oh, and i must add...the part where Harry is arguing with himself, is totally confusing. I can't tell when his brain is talking to him, or when he is talking to his brain...*I don't kno if what i just said makes any sense* Oh, and Draco hunny, you totatotally a poof. You got the hair, the body, and i think you really did like being sprawled out all over Harry. Oh and Hababebabe, i think you need to beat him into submission - dominatrix style - you know, the leather, the whips, the whole works. It should work out on him;) later, Luv yea all. Kerwyn