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for The Raven

by BreeMcGregor

person Sandra
schedule March 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YEAH on the A in Forensics! I\'m a toxicologist. The amount of info floating around in your head at the moment, I bet you\'d kill for a pensive!
person satanicmidget
schedule March 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Farout it has been a while since you\'ve updated but im so frickin\' glad you did!!! I love this story and i love the way you write iti really dont think anything could be changed... so realy i just wanted to let you know that people do read your story and please please PLEASE keep it comming!

Cheers,
Satanicmidget

P.S. congrats on the exam. I\'m a university student from Australia so i know how hard it is to try and study and pass and have some time out for yourself.
person magicalwonder
schedule February 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This really is a good story. I like the direction that it seems to be going. I personally can\'t wait till Snape see\'s Draco, or the other way around.

B
person Lady Tigresa
schedule February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so much! I hope snape will show hermione his feelings.Update soon!
person Amanda
schedule February 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Why haven\'t you updated this?! I can\'t believe you\'ve stopped, It was so good!
person Amanda
schedule February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please update this! It is so good! You shouldn\'t let it just die off!
person edie
schedule January 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please for the love of god update!!!!! it will kill me if i dont know what happens!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person cdkobasiuk
schedule January 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great job. I liked your Snape.

cdk
person AJH
schedule January 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE, PLEASE UPDATE THIS SOON! I AM GOING TO DIE IF YOU DON\'T!
person Moi
schedule January 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s a lovely, charming, sweet story, and I like it very much. I am looking forward to seeing what happens. The plot idea is an interesting twist on the Hr/S \'ship. I have only one real criticism, which I hope is constructive. Your story reads like a children\'s book, and the masturbation scene seems as if it was inserted to meet the ratings expectations. I understand the purpose of it, of course: to give Snape a heads-up (in more ways than one), but stylistically it doesn\'t fit together. I enjoy the simplistic style of your prose so much, I hate to suggest adopting a more sophisticated voice just to fit in with the erotic expectations of the website, although that would make the story as a whole hang together better.

Please please please do not stop writing this story. It has a great deal of promise, and so does your writing.