rate_review Reviews

Please work on your grammar and punctuation. I like the ideas that you had, but I struggled to read through the chapters as I kept stopping to re-read the sentences.

I agree with both the previous reviews; a potentially good story, but the grammar and punctuation make it verge on the unreadable. Keep going, though.

P.S. Is the title a reference to the Muse album Absolution?

I did agree with Writerlimn...but I noticed you cleaned it up, it's better now. Keep writing

You have made this story difficult to reaou nou need to review your grammar and puncuation. You have so many long, run-on sentences that the reader has an impossible time trying to understand your point. There is no such word as "Im." I assume you mean "I'm" i.e. the contraction of "I am." It scares me that you don't know basic puncuation like simple contractions. Go back and review your elementary school English classes.