rate_review Reviews

Your whole first chapter is missing.

come on you can't leave it like this. It is such a great chapter.........

Major fluffyness. I liked that part. Unfortunatly rape victims rarely have normal sex lives. Espically when they have been raped before like Harry was with Voldemort.

OK, in general I thought that it was a good fic- disturbing, fightening, disgusting, but good. There are a few spelling and typo mistakes though, and most of them are a little distracting from the... well, I want to call it smut, but it\'s more than that.

The second thing I want to say is... do you want a beta reader? If you do, I am offereing my services. I know there may be some mistakes in this review, but that\'s mainly because I\'m not concentrating on what I\'m typing, and I haven\'t got a spell check. If you want me to do it, just let me know.

PLEASE update soon and when you do ..PLEASE!...email me with a link to the page to let me know?....

I like, ideas how about fisting?

argh. first chapter was a lot better. second had many mistakes, like you would capitilize things when you didn't need to or just... heh. and... gosh, they were so out of character. it was confusing how he got out of the restraints. and i did NOT like how much they were ooc. and.... gosh. harry would call his dad 'father' or 'dad' not 'james potter.' and they would NEVER screw voldemort, it would be so... just... no. they couldn't. grrr... harry was sobbing last chapter because of what voldemort did and now this one, he says how he loved it. fucking idiot. they would never. soooooooo out of character. it's like you know what they look like but no idea how they act. fucking sucks.