rate_review Reviews

isn't the simile "like a moth to a flame" a bit overused in everything? (all sorts of writing I mean, i.e. Spiderman)
Your poem slightly reminded me of a whole set of haiku's thrown all together rather randomly. Don't normally read things about Snape and Hermione, to tell the truth Snape being that... mushy seems to be out of character for him, but it's your poem so do what you will.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Not bad for a first shot at poetry. Simple, yet clearly delineates a feeling. Keep writing.

I think that you have captured the essence that a great many HG/SS multi-chaptered fics try to portray with that beautifully structured poem. And I like the fact that you didn\'t use any big adjectives or such - for me it emphasised that the truth that what he feels is laid bare. As for me - it reminds me that I am also drawn to HG/SS fan fiction like a moth to a flame - plain and simple as that!

This is really lovely, and expresses in a few short lines what so many of us try to illustrate in innumerable chapters of fanfic. Thank you for sharing this.

like all of your work, it is exceptional

That was good! I cannot say that I know alot about poetry, english was not my strong point in school...
I did read once though that \"Poetry isnt written to be analysed, it is meant to inspire without reason, to
touch without understanding\" and your poem did that. I liked the way you encapsulated all the emotion
in the simple syllables (spelling??). Dont let the lack of reviews stop you from trying out poetry again.