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for You had me from hello

by Serenitas

schedule October 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my! I actually have an extreme dislike of first-person HP stories, but this was fabulous! Honestly. I am a little worried that Draco said this story was for the Daily Prophet (sex scene and all?). lol But I loved Draco's self-ego stroking. That makes me laugh. Wonderful job with this.
schedule August 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The mistakes in this took away from the pleasure of reading this. Not all of them were typos, there were spots where you looked as if you smashed your head into the keyboard. There were areas were grammar and punctuation could have been worked out better, by a simple read over. Also spell check would have caught a lot of the errors. I find it easier to read a story that has one space between paragraphs and not many. It takes away from the feel of the story. You spelled tongue wrong every time you used it. It got really annoying. As far as the plot and story line goes, it was a good idea but poorly executed. I could suggest a beta, however if you want and you don't feel that I'm offending you, I've fixed the obvious errors. You can reach me at MisstressNicole@hotmail.com.

~~Avid Harry/Draco Shipper -Nicole
person Carol
schedule November 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have only one word to say. De...Li...Cious! God damn that was good. *shivers and grins* Harry and Draco sex is always the best! It was beautiful! Nice job doing it in the first person context. I don't write first person fics all that well, but that was great! Keep writing!
person Kayo
schedule September 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story. It was sweet and breathtaking all at once. It flowed pretty well too, and you managed yo cover a lot of things at once. So thumbs up for this one. Keep up the good work.
person Kathryn Taylor
schedule January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was so sweet!!!! That was the best portrayal of Draco that i have read (well other than J.K's Draco) i hope you keep writing!!!
person Lee
schedule January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, but my sister began giggling at the phrase "dead, mounted and stuffed." When I listened closer, I could hear her chocking out the words 'Slytherins' and 'necropheliacs'. Again, sorry, just had to share.
person Dackelblick
schedule November 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Beatiful. So, so beautiful! Love it!
person Aisling
schedule October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! i luved this--- soooo great!! cya xx
person avihenda
schedule August 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was such a cute story! loved it, it was truly sweet.
person LADY
schedule June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YOU DID IT AGAIN. ANOTHER GREAT FIC. I LIKE YOUR WRITING STYLE A LOT AN YOU HAVE A GREAT IMGANATION

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK