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wow i like this story very much
update soon will yah

I\'ve logged onto your adult fanfiction page and just can\'t wait until you UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Mika aka Gemini Malfoy

Ok, she doesn\'t want to marry him, is forced into since she wants to marry Draco even less, and now is happy that he essentially raped her and left her on her wedding night? Um, why?

He knew she was inexperienced but because he didn\'t want to drag it out he did little to prepare her and if I am reading this right, he orgasmed but she didn\'t? Then he leaves her feeling lousy to find her way to their reception? Why would she even imagine that sleeping with him again will improve that? And he is going to sleep with her again after hexing him for what reason? Warm body? The small amount of feeling he may hold for her, or at least, he believes he holds for her as none of his actions save cleaning up for his wedding show this?

Since there is little character development to date, we have no answers to any of this. In fact, if not read in order, we have several different, conflicting stories all within this one. Why are they acting like this? Why did Hermione and Severus have time to shop but not have the houselves move her clothes? Why are his quarters one room when even the smallest boarding schools give at least a small sitting room, bath, and bedroom. Even as a lowely student I had better rooms at my boarding schools! And that\'s with no magic! All that time describing a wonderful room and that\'s all we get? One? Please take some of that lovely description and feed it into the characters actions-you have several interesting ideas, but none are being pursued in the manner they deserve.

Bravo. Like how she keeps her know-it-all attitude. xD;

This story is getting better and better in every chapter. I can\'t wait for the next chapter. Good luck.

Poor Snape! Getting stupefied at the Head Table in front of everyone! Good thing Dumbledore rescued the situation. Snape won\'t be messing with Hermione any more... I\'m glad she\'s standing up for herself.

One minor suggestion: single-space lines within each paragraph, then two line spaces between paragraphs. Just like this comment of mine.

Looking forward to reading the next chapter.

This is a great story.I can\'t wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

I like your story very much. I would say poor Hermione but she has got to see that this is for her own safety. Besides I doubt very much Snape will stop her from pursing further education and a career. I\'m mean the man is a bit cruel but not that cruel. Look forward to reading the next chapter.

Thank you! I really can\'t wait to read more.

I really like this story so far. Please update soon.