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This is seriously an impressive achievement. Plot and prose are both excellent - even though there are some second-language kind of mistakes, it doesn't take away from the obvious thoughtfulness and general quality of your writing. It is such a sweet, well developed story. I couldn't imagine how this couple could be made to work, nevermind having a child and then allowing for a later love story. You made it all work really well! I especially liked that Hermione and Severus did not sort of fall into their relationship right away, but had sometime to just be friends while getting other needs met with other people. It wasn't what I was expecting and at first it wasn't what I wanted, but in the end I think it's a lot better in terms of characterization, and a lot more satisfying in terms of the story. I also appreciate the chapter where Harry receives the letter, and the slightly indirect way all that very emotionally charged content is delivered. I don't think I could have stood to read the moment-by-moment version of the battle and Albus' decline and all that...it would be too sad, but also too easy to write badly. I think this story shows that you are a very skilfull writer. Great job, and thanks for sharing!

I loved this story. I saw where it was going. I knew the end was written when I began it. I must admit though, I had vain dreams of Vamps being able to save AD. But, not going there really kept your story from flowing into rare fancifulness and made it even more touching. I cried. I just absolutely loved this story!

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This story is brilliant. The pairing is unconventional but the way you've written is a
Amazing.

Hey, I can look over your work if you like. I'm an English major and I speak German, since I lived there for a year. Great job on the English, though. My German is definitely not that good. But, yeah, if you want I'll look over your things and correct it. You can also ask for clarification in German and I can try to help.

OMG I can't believe this story was soo good, i cried when Albus died in j.k's book the half blood prince, i also cried when he dies in this story, i loved it, i wish albus could've stayed alive with hermione and their baby, i wish there was another way dumbledore could've defeated voldemort without sacrficing his magic in doing so, also i loved the love making bits in the story it showed how much albus really cared about Hermione before and afterwards, i laughed and cried at this fanfiction, please can u post a sequel of this story i really loved it, i think their should be more Albus/Hermione fanfictions on this web site but it's only got one and it's your story.
when i was reading i felt excited plus when i was away for this story i had it on the back of my mind and i'd have a big smile on my face whenever i thought about it.

You know, when I first saw this fanfiction, I thought, "this is going to be weird, isn't it?" Well, I was right. But it was a good weird. This is one of the best fanfictions I've ever read, hands down. Yes, there were a few spelling errors and it looked like you'd hastened through a few chapters, but it was wonderfully thought-out and, while being strangely erotic for old people lemons, it wasn't mindless smut. It was intellegent and a joy to read.
I look forwards to your next story,
Seite.

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Awwww! that was such a sweet story! im glad that I decided to carry on reading, despite the mistakes with spelling and format, it would have been fantastic if you could have had it betaed, its one of the nicest love stories I have read in HP fanfiction, I would reccomend that everyone give it a chance, even if Albus/Hermione isnt really the thing they like to read! I also very much liked your Severus and his interactions with both Albus and Hermione. Once again, great story, thanks for sharing : )

I've probably read 40 other forced marriage fics based on the WIKTT challenge, and this is one of the best. I was surprised by the pairing, but you wrote it quite convincingly. It's a terrifc love story, and you did a good job with the plot, too. I'm eager to read your other stories.

I'm impressed that you can write this well in English, since it's not your native language. Few writers have this much talent. The story could use a good beta, but it is very readable as is. I encourage you to spend your time and talent on writing more stories, rather than on fussing with the spelling on this one. If you write in other fandoms, please send me a link to your other stories (original fic, too).

Congratulations on this fine story.

I like your story.
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