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May 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You\'re doing a good job but there are some things I must mention. First of all you are going to need a beta to refine what you have written. During some of the passages that you had in your story, it was unclear what you were trying to say. Secondly you need to try and shoot for at least one thousand words per chapter. If you want I can beta for you but I am not the best one in the world. My email is timegrimmors@yahoo.com if you want to take me up on my offer.
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May 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey, i didn\'t check to see if you got your one review already or not, but i\'ll review anyway. feel special, dude, i don\'t review many stories.
um...so yes, i\'m reading it, and it looks like it could go places and i wanna see how it turns out, so you better as hell be continueing this!
the only peeve that i have about it is that for some reason or another it goes very long horizontal wise and i\'m forced to move bottbottom cursor...but maybe that bugs me cuz i\'m lazy...hm...always a possibility, lol. plus some of the spelling stuff is...odd...if you want a beta or something, i\'d be willing to go through...though i\'m mostly only good for grammer and spelling and the like...drop me an e-mail if you\'re interested (and no, i will *not* be offended if you don\'t take me up on the offer)
um...so yes, i\'m reading it, and it looks like it could go places and i wanna see how it turns out, so you better as hell be continueing this!
the only peeve that i have about it is that for some reason or another it goes very long horizontal wise and i\'m forced to move bottbottom cursor...but maybe that bugs me cuz i\'m lazy...hm...always a possibility, lol. plus some of the spelling stuff is...odd...if you want a beta or something, i\'d be willing to go through...though i\'m mostly only good for grammer and spelling and the like...drop me an e-mail if you\'re interested (and no, i will *not* be offended if you don\'t take me up on the offer)