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Hello, Lisa/Shanti. I think you\'ve created something plausible here. Snape is an emotionally damaged character, and it makes sense that he\'s a virgin. Though I can see how some people might find it improbable because of his past as a DE, there\'s really nothing in the canon that suggests that DEs are sexual predators, as many writers on this site have extrapolated. And you\'ve worked up a good OC who is a terrific counterpart to Snape. You\'re keeping him pretty snarky.

So ... any updates forthcoming??

Woo! What an amazing story so far! *showers you with gold stars* ^_^ I love how mature your plotline and characters are. Here\'s just a titchy bit of constructive criticism, though, kay? Don\'t take it the wrong way, and you don\'t even need to listen to it! My only problem is that I find Harry to be a bit too dark and angry. He seems rather flat at times, like all of the good emotions have been sucked out of him. He\'s a teenager that\'s been through more than any one person should have to go through, true, I p I personally always thought that he would be the type to become more inverted and silent when withdrawing from people, rather than angrier and more sullen. Your Harry seems to be unable to see anything besides anger anymore, though I know that that\'s due to your plot. It\'s just... maybe sometime in the future you could give him at least a half-hearted little five minutes of being almost happy?

Eh, sorry. I like your Harry fine. ^_^ Just wanted to add my opinion. Hope that you didn\'t take this the wrong way. Keep up the great work!

Wow, this gets better and better. You are such a talented writer. Confess now, what have you published!

Hey Shanti,
I\'m all caught up now. Took me long enough.

I am really interested in hearing what Harry gleaned from Voldemort\'s mind. This could be a turning point in the war. Knowing Voldemort\'s true intentions. Howzers.

Yes, I know who the \"red shirts\" are from Star Trek. Those were the poor schlubs on the away missions that were always killed by the aliens. They were the nameless, almost faceless crew members who died and they always seemed to have a constant supply of.

More social stuff with the Malfoys? Yuck. Narcissa is such a witch (with a \"b\"). Her cocentcention toward Rowena just rankles me. I can\'t wait til her supply of \"beauty\" potion runs dry. Personally, I would prefer it that Rowena hexes her into oblivion, but if Narcissa just becomes a wrinkled crone, I guess that would be more fitting justice. Oh, and take their money away too.

Cheers!

Bravo! That was beautifully done. They complement each other very well. Though inexperienced, Snape is a skilled and generous lover. Kudos to you.

Surprising and intereg tug turn of events. Snape loves her. Awe. Smut ahead, goody.

THIS IS THE BEST FANFIC I HAVE EVER READ!!! And I have read over a hundred, mostly Snapefic. I prefer the Snape/OC stories and this really is so well done. You have obviously done a great deal of writing before to have such a tight, intense and descriptive writing style. This is a very believable Severus with wonderful psychology. One request. I have noticed that all these fanfics have both parties seeing \"fireworks\" the first time and every time during the lemon scenes. Since the rest is so believable, I would love for that aspect to be developed over a few lemon scenes also. Anyway, I\'ll be saving your whole story in my computer when it\'s complete for further reading and will keep checking on your further writing. (I still think you are a published author. You are too polished not to be.)

Every one else...while you are waiting for updates on this fic, I can recommend two other well written Snapefics available on Fanfiction.net: Whole Again, Severus (also Whole Again, Remus and Whole Again, Sirius) and The Other Side of Darkness.

Can\'t wait to read more!!

I really like your story so far. it really show the souls of caracters and loooks fitting to the cannon. one thing snaged me though was how could harry possibly know what potion snape was brewiith ith his blood. all he should know is that some death-eater women asked for it and maybe connect it to katrina. in my mind there should be countless potions that use blood

This story is wonderful -- I love anything that attempts to give Snape humanity. Of course, it helps enormously that I always have Alan Rickman stalking through my head, uttering things in that beautifulbeautiful voice . . . oh, melt. Not that your Snape needs that help! Anyway, I especially like the whole fatherly angle. Snape has always struck me as more bluster than balls (apologies for the phrase) when it comes to not caring about things and inside he just desperately wants to care and be cared for. And he is! Fantastic!

And it totally sucks that you\'ve got some bint harping on your grasp of canon -- you\'re creating your own world and you should be able to branch out as much as you like. It\'s not as if you don\'t have a firm grasp of canon, anyway. I don\'t see any Mary Sues prancing about. You\'re doing a great job witis sis story. Ignore him/her/it; they\'re totally not worth the sweat if they can\'t respect the time and effort you\'ve poured into this.

Rock on.

Wow! What an exciting chapter. Glad Katrina was safe. I\'m still enjoying this story - you write it how you want to - I\'ve read all the books several times and have seen nothing contradictory - this is fiction after all, and you can write your own world. Flamers are quite common on FFN I bel, so, so just ignore them.