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Exciting story! I\'ve never read a Veela Malfoy story. I\'m enthralled. Hope you can update soon.

Huh. Nice job on the Narcissa scenes, and semi-supporting Albus\'s stance on Ginny\'s protection. Still extremely disappointed in Ginny though. Awfully small fit she threw.

A very good chapter...I realize you have to set it all up...but the wait is killing us.

Hopefully your busy week goes well and you have an update for us soon.

TTFN
Kelly

I like your writing style and the idea of this fic. The plot line that Ginny\'s brother bill is also in a veela relationship makes the premise more belivable. I also like the Draco / Severus connection and the line about how he wishes he was his son. I thought the disastrous conversation with Severus and Ginny was also believable, but I thievereverus needs to have a confrontation with Draco about the name calling and Draco needs to apologize for the whore comment. It was sooo out of line and he needs to specifically address his apology before she considers being with him. I also like the attraction scenes where she responds physically without thinking, but he obviously wouldn\'t be satisfied with just that level of relationship. Please keep going. It is unique and well written.

Oh my, is Narcissa dead? This is bad.

At least four Weasley boys will be clamoring around Ginny now. They kind of remind me of the Marx brothers in a way. All slapstick.

What is up with Hermione? Things not well with Ron?

Cheers.

I was really hoping that Draco would be able to get his mother away safely. I hope you update soon!

What will Lucius do? And is Severus, Narcissa\'s mate?

No, I didn\'t think Ginny was a doormat. I just didn\'t understand her motivation. Sorry if I\'m being tough on you... I really like this fic and I want to see the spunky, rough n tumble Ginny I see in the books. I\'ll try not to be so difficult from now on.
Thanks for having Ginny ponder all the questions that I had.
I KNEW IT! Narcissa\'s lover was supposed to be Snape. He seems a little bitter. How did she betray him?
Why is Hermione so sad? Why didn\'t anyone notice?

Cheers.

hmmm...chapter nine is awfully brutal, as well as the requests he makes of Dumbledore et al pretty unreasonable. I doubt if they would agree, or, honestly, allow Draco to force Ginny to be his mate. Now, Ginny is a Weaseley, a strong and proud woman herself, from a family of strong proud people. What he did to her in chapter nine would probably make her hate him, not be interested in him. Unless this is going to devolve into a rape fic, ewww, then is seems likely that Ginny will ask for protection from Draco, and Dumbledore will give it. In ch nine Draco hexes her, calls her a whore, bites her severely, not a love bite, but an animal bite, manhandles her, threatens her and terrifies her, I\'m betting, since GINNY IS NOT A DOORMAT, she\'ll consider the quality of her life as his mate and possibly cut him loose. Of course, then he will try to win her back. But please don\'t turn Ginny into a girl who will accept that sort of behavior, or Dumbledore into a man who would allow a collegue to be abused. It is really very OOC.

Hmm...from an emotional perspective that was excellent-looking forward to a bit of balance when Ginny comes out of her shock in the next couple of chapters. As for problems within the scene, it was a bit unclear when Narcissa takes her to Draco\'s room that she leaves-had to read that a couple of times to make sure she slammed the door with her in the hall. Other problem-midway through when Draco was biting Ginny\'s neck and you mention something to the extent of the beating of her life faltering it\'s almost like he is temporarily a vampire. Was he nibbling, drawing blood, biting but not breaking skin...? A bit confused there. As for coming up next-please, please, please tell me Ginny\'s just in shock-personally, insanity or not, I would be apperating or on the first train out as far as I could go-followed by whatever transportation got me away. From her earlier reactions-she may be a bit kinder than I, but she doesn\'t seem to be too thrilled about this either. (All yummy goodness aside, of course.)