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May 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this is the BEST harry potter fan fiction i have ever read .. who\'d of thunk that Hermione inside was a bad ass biker chic..... my dreams have come true and then that Draco actually has a good side all of it is too good to be true and can i say that depending on the chapter i would love to be either hermione or draco... lol KEEP WRITING please . I am waiting with bated breath for another addition
Amie
Amie
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May 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
great
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May 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love the way you wrote Hermione. Nice to see her with a wild side. It is completely believable how you got her and Draco as a couple in this. This is hands down one of my favorite Draco/Hermione stories.
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May 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I liked the race (we knew Hermoine would win on the motorcycle) and the wet t-shirt contest but...
WHOA! The photoshoot and sex on the bike was completely & utterly HOT!!!
OMFG!
I needed to have cool water dumped on me after reading that.
Great job, I really love this story because Draco & Hermione are so OOC but in a very consistent way. It\'s like the whole story is AU.
Looking forward to more!
WHOA! The photoshoot and sex on the bike was completely & utterly HOT!!!
OMFG!
I needed to have cool water dumped on me after reading that.
Great job, I really love this story because Draco & Hermione are so OOC but in a very consistent way. It\'s like the whole story is AU.
Looking forward to more!
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May 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey!
I just ...ADORE all your stories. You are the best author and you are like a model to me. I have read all your stories and i don\'t have a favorite because they are ALL just more than G-R-E-A-T. You have a great style. If you will stop writing we will lose an incredible author. A mailing list ? I\'m in! My email is evil_vanessa16@hotmail.com . I am waiting for your updates on both of your stories. I just love them :)))!
XOXO,
Vanessa
I just ...ADORE all your stories. You are the best author and you are like a model to me. I have read all your stories and i don\'t have a favorite because they are ALL just more than G-R-E-A-T. You have a great style. If you will stop writing we will lose an incredible author. A mailing list ? I\'m in! My email is evil_vanessa16@hotmail.com . I am waiting for your updates on both of your stories. I just love them :)))!
XOXO,
Vanessa
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May 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You are my favorite Harry Potter writer. I just love your stories. I have read all your work with HG/DM. I have also printed them out to put in a book so that I can read them any time. I can\'t wait to see what you have in store for Phoenix. Could you please put me on your e-mail list. I haven\'t replied yet, because my computer has been having an attitude with me lately and I can\'t always reply. Can\'t wait to see more soon.
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May 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to tell you that I absolutley love your stories. Seriously, I\'ve read the ones on this site many times. Keep up the good work.
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May 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yo,
Bloody good story, I\'ll try and review this in the order of chapters but if they\'re out of order i apoligize. and for any bad spelling.
I hate to start with bad stuff, but the moine-harry break up did seem superficial, brief and unrealistic (i no the whoel story was but unrealistic break up sreally annoy me). The smut was a nice warm up for the plot and definately kept me reading waiting for some more.
A very nice setup in the next few chapters to keep things moving and alsoexplexplain a few more character though processes and relationships.
I read ur fight scene and i managed tllowllow it alright, as i\'ve been doing karate for while and i know how people react in a fight. however some of my mates have read ur story and it completely lost them. i know it may seem perfectly planned out in ur head but putting it down on paper is a lot harder than is sounds. I liked it so plz don\'t feel disheartened by any whinging about it. On the note of the fight, in later chapters i wouldn\'t mind if u could plz smack the shit out of pansy a bit more. She annoys shitshit out of me and should be shot but i can\'t afford the bullets.
Just to add a bit more smut to the story could u have a flash back of moine and the bikers (the one that always picks her up over his shoulder, i can\'t remember his name) fling or something. I dunno, use ur creativity and spice things up a bit.
Every one seems to be a bit too nice about moine and draco getting together, could u plz put a bit more sniping in it just so u can have some more bitch fights.
One thought that i had was a fling between one of the bikers and one of the teachers or something like that. It could be developed into a huge plot and there are many twist that u could do at the end of it.
I hope u don\'t have the moine out of the movies in mind when u plan this in ur head. I just can\'t see her doing some of this stuff. One of the people iwould like to see you develop more is ron, coz he never seems to get any action.
One of the best things about ur story is that ur characters are CONSISTANTLY out of character. unlike alot of other fics that i\'ve read. Ur way with words is definately up there amoungst the best i\'ve read.
Plz don\'t end it in an \"and they all live happily ever after\" or \"and one of them dies whispering the others name\". Ur story\'s too good to be ruined like that.
Feel free to ignore my ideas completely if u want as this is ur story and ur doing a great job.
Molle
Bloody good story, I\'ll try and review this in the order of chapters but if they\'re out of order i apoligize. and for any bad spelling.
I hate to start with bad stuff, but the moine-harry break up did seem superficial, brief and unrealistic (i no the whoel story was but unrealistic break up sreally annoy me). The smut was a nice warm up for the plot and definately kept me reading waiting for some more.
A very nice setup in the next few chapters to keep things moving and alsoexplexplain a few more character though processes and relationships.
I read ur fight scene and i managed tllowllow it alright, as i\'ve been doing karate for while and i know how people react in a fight. however some of my mates have read ur story and it completely lost them. i know it may seem perfectly planned out in ur head but putting it down on paper is a lot harder than is sounds. I liked it so plz don\'t feel disheartened by any whinging about it. On the note of the fight, in later chapters i wouldn\'t mind if u could plz smack the shit out of pansy a bit more. She annoys shitshit out of me and should be shot but i can\'t afford the bullets.
Just to add a bit more smut to the story could u have a flash back of moine and the bikers (the one that always picks her up over his shoulder, i can\'t remember his name) fling or something. I dunno, use ur creativity and spice things up a bit.
Every one seems to be a bit too nice about moine and draco getting together, could u plz put a bit more sniping in it just so u can have some more bitch fights.
One thought that i had was a fling between one of the bikers and one of the teachers or something like that. It could be developed into a huge plot and there are many twist that u could do at the end of it.
I hope u don\'t have the moine out of the movies in mind when u plan this in ur head. I just can\'t see her doing some of this stuff. One of the people iwould like to see you develop more is ron, coz he never seems to get any action.
One of the best things about ur story is that ur characters are CONSISTANTLY out of character. unlike alot of other fics that i\'ve read. Ur way with words is definately up there amoungst the best i\'ve read.
Plz don\'t end it in an \"and they all live happily ever after\" or \"and one of them dies whispering the others name\". Ur story\'s too good to be ruined like that.
Feel free to ignore my ideas completely if u want as this is ur story and ur doing a great job.
Molle
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May 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
tas:
Just when I come home from a cruddy couple of days there is \'The Phoenix\' and is brightens my day. Enjoyed Draco figuring Hermione\'s secret out so quickly and that he has a secret of his own. Enjoyed the broom race and think it makes sense that Draco would win that. I wonder what will happen at their cycle race.
But I must admit I am looking forward to the photo shoot - so reminiscent of \"Forever Fantasy\" - one of my favorites!
Only one request - MORE SMUT! Your Draco & Hermione are very hot!
Just when I come home from a cruddy couple of days there is \'The Phoenix\' and is brightens my day. Enjoyed Draco figuring Hermione\'s secret out so quickly and that he has a secret of his own. Enjoyed the broom race and think it makes sense that Draco would win that. I wonder what will happen at their cycle race.
But I must admit I am looking forward to the photo shoot - so reminiscent of \"Forever Fantasy\" - one of my favorites!
Only one request - MORE SMUT! Your Draco & Hermione are very hot!
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May 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I was so happy that you updated so much in such a short amount of time. I have a problem with fragments too. But sometimes, they need to be that way. It is a statement, especially when you are writing from a certian characters point of view, thoughts are fragmented, sometimes it flows better with the fragments. I\'ve seen it in many novels as well, so I know it is a technique used often. Keep up the good work.
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