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Tis is really goood welll written i hope that u update soon there is onlyone bad thing about it which cab be aesilyy changed try and keep itin paragraphs be it wa hard to read having to scroll from left to write

wow this is a really good i love HG/DM fic especaily veela storys there arnt many out there and and if are not completed plaese update soon but change the fomattin becoz it was hard to read

Love it, left me wanting more please!!!

This seems like a good start... Too bad the formatting was a little screwed up... But please, update!!

i look forward to reading the next chapter.

Please format your story. It\'s annoying to read.

Going the veela route...I like that you made BZ/GW a part of this as well. So many do a DM/? and that\'s the story. Can\'t wait to see the chase. Nice job cutting the explanation from Prof. Dumbledore-lets us imagine and other characters reminise later to fill in the blanks. Can\'t wait to see how the others thought that little meeting went. Another prophecy? This should be interesting. Don\'t forget to run a quick spell check and grammar check-there were a splattering of places where the scene dragged because descriptions got a bit choppy. Otherwise, cut the text to fit the screen and this should be good. Do we get to find out why GW is not so upset (besides that fact that she thinks BZ is hot, of course)?

this is so good i love it pleeez keep going for my sake

This is really difficult to read, I suggest you change your formatting, and to seperate quotes from different people.

This is a good start, I like DM/HG pairings and the veela twist hasnt been used to often with them, Post more soon, you\'re on to something. Just try to fix the formatting, because it was difficult to read with it extending so far over.

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