rate_review Reviews

I think that this is one of the most spectacular one-shots I have ever read!
When you said it was your first, I totally couldn't believe it.
I wish you WOULD do another chapter!

Actually that friend of yours is right, sometimes your writing leaves the impression that you are trying too hard. Descriptions are fine as a tool for writers, but sometimes you have to be sparse with them in order to be effective and not smother your reader. Consider the description something that is the salt in the soup and not the water. Maybe if you just close your eyes and imagine the scene that you are writing about, and then just write what you see in front of yinneinner eye, that might make the story more believable. Good luck with your writing, don\'T give up because you are not perfect yet.

Its me again, I just reread your story and honestly for art srt short as that one it is perfect, it would be too much though if you wanted to write like that for more than 2-3 pages. SO still love your story still thinks its erocic*wew* need a cold shower!

I thought it was a great story that was able to express in very few words a great deal of emotion. I really liked it. Thought as gas great

Okay I don\'t know how to say this but I don\'t think there are enough words in the English language to say how great this story is. It\'s sweet and not at the same time I personally Love it.

Hearts~QC

I liked. It was very bittersweet and very beautiful. The writinyle yle also brought the longing across very well.

A very imagery use of language, very erotic and emotional. Beautifully written

Beautiful...i like it a lot, i usually prefer a sub Draco but i cannot complain. I only hope you write some more!

O wow that is excellent. I don\'t know what to say. It leaves me speechless and I can\'t wait for more!

That was amazing! Oh! You should write more often...wow...that was great