rate_review Reviews

This is a really good story. I like it a lot. I hope you update soon. If you could, please send me the chapter before you post it. If you want, you could always sent it to me to beta. I like this story a lot, as I already said, and I hope that you update soon.

arg no more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 damn it update soon!

\"derived immediately towards\" is a little odd. To \"derive\" means to \"come from.\" I DERIVE from florida. This story is DERIVED from Harry Potter. Be careful about making your words too complicated for your reader. Also, look up the literary term \"weak wording\" or \"weak writing.\" Basically, it means that you use too many words like \"it\" and \"that\" and \"had\" \"was.\" For example, the sentence I came up with: \"It was cold.\" I can reword this. What was cold? The weather. And how did the character/narrarator know that the weather was cold? try again, revised: \"The snow beneath my feat crunched as I made my way to the bus stop. I shivered despite the sunlight.\" Holy canoli! Now the reader knows that the weather was cold. After all, how could it be snowy w/o the cold? And its cold enough that \"I shivered\" even when the sun was out. And \"I made my way to the bus stop.\" Now we have a potential plot. My sixth grade english teacher used to say, \"Show; don\'t tell.\" My mother says, \"Actions speak louder than words.\" Try that.

oh! I love this story, and you are doing a very good job translating, and poor, poor Snape. He should take advantage of Harry while he has the chance.

Anyway, will you e-mail when more comes out? Please?

MORE PLESAE! I started 2 read this story when it first came out and then I came across it today and it was like \"WOW! More chapters, oh happy day.\" PLEASE update soon!

ooh! Please update soon! This is absolutely terrific! I can\'t wait to find out what happens next!

I just read the whole story tonight. This is great. Please more like this last chapter! Very hot.

oooh. purty. wait! antidote?*sobs* they didn\'t get to do the wild thing!

You are doing a great job in translating this to English.

The sex is really hot and the feelings all come out very well. Harry\'s plan is working flawlessly, so far.

Please update when you can, I can imagine it\'s not easy for you. I\'ve read this story over again, just to relish in it\'s humour and the hot sexy parts. The internal dialogue is too precious.

Thank you/Merci.

I love the story and can\'t wait for the next chapter. I think everyone understands that it takes a while for you to translate the chapters into English. Don\'t worry about how long it takes, just please continue.