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May 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHH!
I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This made me *squeee* with amazingness!
I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This made me *squeee* with amazingness!
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October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
cute, cute, soppy cuteness! loved it!
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February 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Aw, that was soooo adorable :) I almost cried! If anyone can bring the two worlds together, it's those two. I always ask people who write one liners to make a sequel (sad it neevr works) but I'm not going to ask you to do that. It's not because I don't like it, quite the opposite actually. It's so utterly perfect the way it is that any additions would ruin it. I'm just amazed at the effect of this story. It's just so passionate and real to me (especially after reading smutall day) and I want to keep it with me alawys...if that doesn't sound to corny.. Your'e a fabulous writer.
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September 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awwww- thats so cute !
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December 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really didn\'t understand Draco... I mean, I didn\'t understand his reasons
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September 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ooh i love it. i was sooo afraid this would be sad i was like nonono! but ooh i like it and at the end heehee ooh too bad he didnt remember. but draco can always remind him riiight? lol ^_~
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March 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Aww. That was sweet! I loved it! Hugs, Cherish(Black Elf)
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March 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This fic has the potential to be good. I hope I don\'t sound condescending, because that isn\'t my intent, therefore, I hope you don\'t take it as such when I tell you to get a beta reader. Your grammar leaves a lot to be desired in places, and a beta reader can help with that. I know for a fact that I would be lost without mine.
You had a tendency, especially at the start, to change tense in the middle of a sentence, and most people will just stop reading there and then, I almost did myself. Choose a tense, and stick to it.
The characterisation was off. If you\'re going to make a character different, then you need to give said character a reason for being different. If this reason is not explained, a reader will not buy it. I have to admit, I just skimmed the last half.
Despite that, as I mentioned at the start, the fic has potential. I hope you decide to tweak this one, as I wouldn\'t mind returning to read it when that\'s done.
You had a tendency, especially at the start, to change tense in the middle of a sentence, and most people will just stop reading there and then, I almost did myself. Choose a tense, and stick to it.
The characterisation was off. If you\'re going to make a character different, then you need to give said character a reason for being different. If this reason is not explained, a reader will not buy it. I have to admit, I just skimmed the last half.
Despite that, as I mentioned at the start, the fic has potential. I hope you decide to tweak this one, as I wouldn\'t mind returning to read it when that\'s done.