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for On A Mission

by Hermione

person Anna
schedule March 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Interesting its a good story but it needs more depth its to speratic. it would be cool it you went more in to it.
*Shrugs*
Oh randome note.... you dont pick your form it more or less picks you. thus peter the rat.. Yeah anyways like the story good job.
person egastin
schedule March 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
great story. please continue it.
person anonymous
schedule March 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon!
person adonia
schedule March 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
wow this storys great, a little hard to read but really auesom. Please update soon i cant wait to hear what she says
person Sasha
schedule March 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like it, but you need detail....detail is what makes up a great story. Don\'t hit me! *ducks*
person dem
schedule March 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh harsh cliff hanger! please update soon. ^^
person jeannette
schedule March 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i hope you continue with this story,it\'s a really good beginning.