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I *love* what you did to Lucius!!! Exactly what he deserved. Please don\'t let Severus get caught. Looking forward to your last chapter and epilogue.

Really good chapter. I wonder what kind of person Lucious will grow to be. He will have to have a new personality. Hopefully his knowledge on how to survive day to ay will not be lot to him. I think Hermione is going to be pissed at Severus for some reason. (yes, I know they are not real people...but I live in my own fantasy world). I am looking forward to your next upate. --Innogen

your story has a lot of promise and potential, not to mention suspense. Please consider getting a beta reader and proofreading (use spell check in your word processing program) before posting, because spelling & grammar errors detract from what is otherwise an enjoyable re In In this chapter (10), you have Severus \"twinkle,\" something characteristic of Dumbledore & very OoC of our favorite potions master. Snape *smirks*. ^_^

I really like the way you have Severus\' tender and sweet (aww!) oldfashioned gentlemanly courtship of Hermione contrast with Lucius\' brutal, violent campaign of revenge. Also, don\'t drop the plotline about the \"seid\" Norse magic book of Lucius\'. I\'d like to see Hermione research it. Please continue the story; I\'m very interested in seeing how things will turn out.

Your Hermione showed the fire and bravery (not to mention the *intelligence*) of Rowling\'s (the girl who, after all, slapped Draco in the face). Not every fanfic Hermione does. For a while, I thought she was too wimpy and OoC for being too trusting of Malfoy. I mean, that old seduction tactic of Casanovas, \"come over to my place and see my ________.\" is soo cliche.

Severus\' retaliation against Malfoy seems a bit drastic. Is it permanent, this mindwipe? I thought Snape would simply stun Lucius, put him into stasis and body bind him, and let the Aurors or Ministry officials determine further punishment. Oh well, I guess it makes sense in your story because the Ministry officials are corrupted by Malfoy\'s bribes. Please continue!!

Chapter 13... What a FABULOUS revenge!!! I am glad to see that you didn\'t have Severus get violent & I do believe that the punishment was what fit that & all other crimes that Lucius had committed!!!

Looking forward to the \"bit of smutty goodness\" as well as finding out what happens when Lucius is found!!! Til chapter 14, Deb >^..^<

Now that is what I call justice. Lucius not being able to remember who he is. Great story. Looking forward to more soon please.

Good chapter. Lucius is such a dark bastard this suits him to a tee. I\'ll bet he\'s going to be pissed that Hermione outsmarted him though...

Grrrr! Lucius really needs to get what he deserves... And I know just the man to give it to him ;o) Way to go, Hermione! Great update :o)

Damn that was a great chapter. Can\'t wait for Severus to kick his butt. Good thinking on Hermiones part. More soon please.

Yay! She escapes! I really don\'t want Lucius to have her. Not when Snape wants her. More...MORE!!!