rate_review Reviews

Well, I thought I\'d review your author\'s note first before continuing on to read the chapter. i havent been to the WIKTT board in many months now, so I don\'t know what waid, id, but I do feel i can comment on a few things. The first thing that grabs my attention is that apparently some people think it odd that Hermione would forgive Snape. I acctually found that to be very accurate, oddly enough. My experiance is that when one has been through something truely awfull, one must forgive the ones who have hurt them in order to go on with their life and heal.Maybe that is just me, though. About Hermione\'s willingness to let Snape near her daughter and herself:well, I did originally find that a tad unrealistic, but then I thought, well, he is her father, he is (somewhat) reformed, and both father and child are intelligent and could learn a lot from eachother.That being said, I can actually see Hermione, also more perseptive that ordinary, to allow Snape to know his child. All in all, i am really getting into this fic, and if there are people telling you that you shouldnt post it, i do hope most fervently that you DON\"T LISTEN TO THEM! Your fic is probably the most original and beautifully written ones that I have come across in some time and I eagerly anticipate more. Now, I think I\'ll go actually read the new chapter!

Well, I really am not one for long reviews, so I\'ll just say this: Brilliant! Please keep writing!

I\'ve read about the controversy on WIKTT surrounding this fic and I thought I\'d put my 2 cents worth: I think that you adequately warned readers that there is reference to a brutal rape in this story and anybody who is offended by it should just stop at the descriptof tof the story. It always kills me that people are warned about subject matter and then proceed to read the story and become sickened or offended by it. It makes me think that some people WANT to be sickened and offended.

That said, I think this is a very well-written, interesting story. There have been times that I\'ve marveled at your use of language and imagery. It\'s very compelling. And I think you\'re doing a good job of showing the pain of all concerned. A couple of things don\'t ring true with me: I\'m having a hard time believing that Hermione could be so compassionate to her rapist. And when he said the things he did to Aubrey . . . I would have flat out killed him. I don\'t think I would have cared how messed up Snape is. So, I\'m having a little trouble relating to Hermione. She seems a little muddled to me, but then again, maybe she has a right to be muddled. And while I love Aubrey, she\'s just too articulate and \"wise\" for an 8 year old (I think she\'s 8. She\'s young, I know). No matter how intelligent a kid is, use of language and emotional insight take a while to develop.

But I\'m willing to overlook all of this because the story is interesting and you\'re such a good writer. I plan to continue to read this and I\'m so curious how Hermione and Aubrey are going to get throught to a True Bastard, LOL. Good job and I\'m looking forward to your updates!

Wow, another great chapter. And I agree with almost all of the characterizations you explained at the beginning of the chapter and I liked the movement between Severus and Hermione during the chapter. Her, coming up and hugging him; him, calling her beautiful; him singing a lullaby to Aubrey. The other good interaction was between Severus and Albus. Severus, treating Albus with the of of a care a loving son does.

Ratshorshort...of course, I think all of the chapters are too short because they *s and and I don\'t like it when something this good comes to an end...ah, well, c\'est la vie.

Thank you for writing it,
T

Just addressing one thing. In your author\'s note you say, \"The person Hermione meets when she comes back to Hogwarts might not be a nice or likable person, but he definitely not a rapist, an abuser (no more than the canon Snape, that is), or anything of the sort.\" If this Snape is \"definitely not a rapist\", then why did you make him the same character as the one who rapes Hermione in the beginning of the story? If he is the one who raped Hermione, then he is indeed a rapist. A reformed rapist, maybe, but that remains to be seen. Oh, and no one on WIKTT at any point suggested that you stop posting. A critique is not a demand to take down your story.

Don\'t know what all the fuss is about your story. I\'ve read FAR less believable rape/redemption stories. I\'ve never been raped, so I couldn\'t tell you if I could look into my rapists eyes and forgive him. I think it\'s possible. Maybe for a certain type of person. I found this story dark and parts of it seem plausible. I don\'t think there has been much in this story I didn\'t think was passible in the Harry Potter fan fiction relm. I say screw the nay-sayers. Write your story! It\'s good! I\'ll read it! You have my 2 enthusiastic thumbs up!

I am enjoying this story immensely. You\'ve taken a difficult subject and written about it in a believable manner by showing how the characters respond to it and each other. Thank you.

Tina

Wow, you are updating fast. Thanks sooo much. Starting to get a bit *uncomfortable* between the two, eh? A tad of sexual frustration? Can\'t wait for the next chapter. I loved the humor with Aubrey and how Snape opened up about his parents. The dialogue in this chapter, well, any chapter for that matter is wonderful. I don\'t think they are OOC in any way. Perfectly written, without a doubt.

Bella

I have not read chapter 19 yet.
I wanted to stop a minute and
applaude you. So many authours of fanfic,
stop writing their stories when there is a
lot of people saying \"That is not how someone
would handle that situation\" I know you have
generated a lot of people talking over on wiktt
about this story. I am glad you are still posting
your story is well written and I have been enjoying
reading it.

If we all review, do we get another chapter????? PLEASE??? I really love the way you have put Harry in charge of things. Seems logical with canon.

I love how Snape is warming up to Hermione and Aubrey. Perhaps there will be love in this fic afterall... Although, I\'m afraid to admit it, I feel there will only be heartache.


Bella Ireland