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Your story has a great plotline, and is written well, though you could use a little help in the proofreading department. I understand that English is not your first language, so I give you credit for how well you have been doing. I would be happy to proofread for you, if you would . I . I am currently proofreading for another HG/SS fanficker named Jan McNeville (see her work on www.fanfiction.net). I can be found online after 9pm on AOL Instant Messenger (theatrekitten) or MSN Messenger (theatrebutterfly@hotmail.com).

Shannon

I started reading this ages ago, and bookmarked it, and finally got to the last chapter tonight. I can tell you, I\'ve really been enjoying it! I can\'t wait to read the next chapter!

YEAH!!!!!!!!!!! We finally get some lovin\'!!!!! As happy as I am to see it, it also scares me about what is to come. Excellent chapter. I loved the dialogue, once again.

Bella Ireland

Wow that was something! I wonder what will happen between them now. Does this mean that Severus wants to be more to Hermione and Aubrey? Little Aubrey kills me! I can just picture the little genius alluding to sex between Hermione & Snape the way she was and Hermioeingeing taken off guard and a bit upset about what that kid might or might not have found out! LOL! She\'s too much! LOVE that kid!

Chapter 21... I think that what Aubrey said was adorable, \"I don\'t think Severus will be happy that you\'re dating some other guy.\" Choldren can see things that adults overlook!!!

I really like the way that you have Severus & Hermione end up sharing each other!!! The massage & conversation that made its way to more!!! They were both very honest in what they wanted or thought that they could allow!!! You did a FABULOUS job of writing their sharing & told so much without gowing into a lot of graphic detail!!!

I am looking forward to seeing how things between them go now that they have taken the step beyond friendship!!! Til chapter 22, Deb >^..^<

In short people are ignorant and when ignorant people cannot find something wrong with something they forcefully try to make something wrong with it. I am glad to see that you are not discouraged by these less than open-minded people. The thing a lot of people forgs ths that it\'s not their story to control and they are nothing but an outsider ment to watch the world you have created and if they find it satisfactory then post little snid-bits of their opinion here. When those \"less-than-open-minded\" people start to force their viscious opinions on aspiring writers like you then discouragement and doun onn one\'s writing settles in. I am very glad to see that this is not the case when it comes to you, and I am going to assume a role here and hopefully get this right when I speak for those who are enjoying your story. You are great, keep going, this story is awesome. Please, continue and don\'t let those who simply are trying to cause problems win. You are a great writer, your ideas are wonderful, and the depth and detail put into the characters emotions and actions have probably encouraged a lot of people. I know at the very least you have encouraged me. I think that\'s all I wanted to say! ^_^

Two chapters for me. The meeting and reasoning of war was intense. I\'m actually glad Anna is wise enough to concentrate on her marriage, whatever her reasoning. The interaction with Severus and Aubrey was brilliant, it does amaze ow yow you have develope Aubrey into this blend of Severus\' and Hermione\'s personalities. It makes her a plausible character IMO. Thanks.

Nice chap. Very depthful. I read the authors note at the begining. What on earth have people been saying? Anyhow, sorry that I don\'t usually review, I\'m lazy, but I love this fic. It\'s brilliant. And since I\'ve spent more time in my life reading than anything else, including sleeping, I think I can tell. It\'s amazing. Keep it up!

Chapter 20... I am glad to see that Anna has chosen to seperate herself from Severus!!! She can see things changing that he is too close to or refuses to acknowledge!!!

Breakfast with Aubrey was interesting;-) She\'s got a point, can\'t blame her for trying!!! I think it\'s a good thing that she iightight as I think she can offer Severus a bit of a challenge!!! I also like that she does know a good bit about him & told him that his mark doesn\'t matter!!! I think she has given him a chance to look at the situation involving Kingsley from a different perspective!!!

I am looking forward to seeing the continuing changes involving Severus, Hermione & Aubrey!!! Til chapter 21, Deb >^..^<

oh my goodness. no words can describe the emotions and feelings this story has stirred in me. pe.. e.. please continue. strangley.. i find myself in hermione\'s shoes and she reacts how i would most of the time.

saying so cause i was raped, pregnant and choose to be a single mother. all at the age of 17, also knowing my attacker, i had to choose to forgive him for my child\'s sake. and much more.. it just screams like you wrote it to touch all those in that position. thank you. thank you so much. this story made me cry so often for so many reasons.. and finally.. strangely.. for the first time.. i cried because i saw myself, i cried for myself. and that felt so good.. so right. thank you.