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I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Awsome story so far. Please update it soon. I\'m really getting interested in what will happen next. I hope you will review and soon.

Tiffany

I don\'t understand why the Japanese girl gets to wear non-regulation uniform (school robes) while no one else is pointed out. This seems very out of place, and disrupts the story a bit (sorry, just pointing out that it is a bit off kilter for the flow.) Other than that I am following along avidly, you have a lot of potential and the best way to improve is to keep writing and practicing. Anyone who discourages that should be ignored.

Well... Your story is scattered. It doesn\'t seem like its going anywhere. Its like you\'re just putting things in to fill up space, which isn\'t working as your chapters are still ridiculously short. Maybe you should use one of those mind maps that teachers start you on in elementary and continue through junior high(but that was only last year for you right?). I don\'t think even a beta reader couave ave this. Unless they wrote the remainder of the story.
I think its funny that you\'re only 16. Is that your excuse for writing this shit? And I am serious when I say shit. This is really bad. I think my 3 year old dog could writeter.ter. But I guess in dog years he\'s still older than you.
hahahahaha have fun at your party! I can see it now... 5 little girls sitting in front of a television watching some movie with a rating no higher than 14A, as your parents wouldn\'t approve of anything worse than that. Enjoy your popcorn and pepsi.
Go do some homework little girl and stop wasting my time.

oh my god - why in hell would Draco be hired back after murdering her cat and calling her a mudblood in front of Dumbledore??? I am waiting on the preverbial pins and needles for the next chapter!

This fic, while decent, will not be getting any more of my attention. I do not appree aue authors who hold up the story for the ransom of reviews. It is childish.

This is interesting so far. I think you need to develop why Hermione hates Snape so much a bit more...It seems that her hate is a little extreme given the events that you have related so far. I love how you have thrown Draco into the middle of all of this. Keep writing!

J :)

I\'ll have you know, Denali, that I\'ve been working on this fic for almost all of the school year. I\'m a slow writer, and I get writer\'s block very easily. I\'m not, infact, holding up the story for reviews, because I was planning on posting it tomorrow, anyway. Also, for your \"childish\" comment, I AM a child. My writing ability is just so-so, but I\'m working on it. I also find that people that flame stories are extremely childish. If you don\'t like it, then why do you read it? It\'s not my fault that you are wasting your time reading something that you don\'t even LIKE.

~*~rosie-chan~*~

This story is alright. I don\'t really see how Hermione is in love with Snape though. Also the part about the veil was over the top and OOC for Hermione. You left in what looks like a note from your Beta in one of the chapters. You may think that this is a flame, but it\'s really not. You will know when you get a flame, they usually have lots of swearing in them and are often in all caps. Not all of your reviews are going to be people saying how much they love your story and please update quickly. Some people, like me, will give you thier honest opinion.

And last of all, saying that you are going to withhold chapters, even as a joke is not in very good taste and quite off putting. Feel free to e-mail me if you have any thing to say to me.

Pease, do continue this story!!
can\'t wait to know what happened.....