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March 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE WOMAN!!!!
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Frini
Love
Frini
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March 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I have been enjoying this story very much. I assume it is going to be much longer eventually, because you have a developed a very large arc for your characters to follow. I look forward to seeing how it all turns out.
By way of constructive criticism, I would just suggest that you ediur cur chapters a little more carefully. There were tiny mistakes here and there that a thorough review on your part (or a beta) should catch. Also, when \"its\" is possessive, there is no apostrophe. When it\'s a contraction of \"it is,\" then there is an apostrophe. Also, the British only use \"pants\" to mean underwear. Use \"trousers\" instead.
The story you\'ve created is very imaginative, and your original character is quite worthy of Snape and the rest of Rowling\'s crew. I wonder if Snape is ever going to relax and trust Aurora, or if their relationship will always be that hostile (which wouldn\'t be very romantic). I\'m not that keen on his trying to ravage her as a control/power struggle thing, and once you go down that road, it would be hard for him to redeem himself. So I\'m curious what your plans are for their future relationship.
I\'m glad you didn\'t turn Snape into just some big, loveable, misunderstood mush. I like him having an edge, although he\'s a tad more volatile than I would have expected. When he had Aurora pinned to the tree, I was torn between wanting her to knock him on his butt and wanting them to get on with it (I don\'t usually read this site for the plots!).
Feel free to e-mail me to discuss what I\'ve said or just to tell me when you\'ve posted another chapter.
Keep writing!
By way of constructive criticism, I would just suggest that you ediur cur chapters a little more carefully. There were tiny mistakes here and there that a thorough review on your part (or a beta) should catch. Also, when \"its\" is possessive, there is no apostrophe. When it\'s a contraction of \"it is,\" then there is an apostrophe. Also, the British only use \"pants\" to mean underwear. Use \"trousers\" instead.
The story you\'ve created is very imaginative, and your original character is quite worthy of Snape and the rest of Rowling\'s crew. I wonder if Snape is ever going to relax and trust Aurora, or if their relationship will always be that hostile (which wouldn\'t be very romantic). I\'m not that keen on his trying to ravage her as a control/power struggle thing, and once you go down that road, it would be hard for him to redeem himself. So I\'m curious what your plans are for their future relationship.
I\'m glad you didn\'t turn Snape into just some big, loveable, misunderstood mush. I like him having an edge, although he\'s a tad more volatile than I would have expected. When he had Aurora pinned to the tree, I was torn between wanting her to knock him on his butt and wanting them to get on with it (I don\'t usually read this site for the plots!).
Feel free to e-mail me to discuss what I\'ve said or just to tell me when you\'ve posted another chapter.
Keep writing!
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February 18, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hey you!
I started reading your fic at my website www.rebelwithoutabroom.kit.net but then something happened to it and we can't seem to fix it. Anyway, I followed you here and I have to say I can't get enough of your story. Update soon and, if you can, please let me know when you post a chapter.
Love
Frini
I started reading your fic at my website www.rebelwithoutabroom.kit.net but then something happened to it and we can't seem to fix it. Anyway, I followed you here and I have to say I can't get enough of your story. Update soon and, if you can, please let me know when you post a chapter.
Love
Frini
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February 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Help, where are updates? Please don't tell me you are not going to finish. This is a great story and you are doing wonderfully. I love your story line and characters. Please Please update. I am sorry I have not reviewed before to tell you I am sure there are others who read and don't review. We'll have to get after them. Thanks for writing.
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February 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
So just what is an Untouchable? Sounds very mysterious, powerful and fascinating. Great story. Snape is perfectly nasty and sexy and Aurura is no Mary Sue. Wow! I can't wait until they get it on for real. Please continue, because this is a very interesting story, and I can't wait to see how Aurora insinuates herself into Snape's spying activities.
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February 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
HI, great story and chapter. Looking for update. Hope you are going to keep writting.
Thanks,
KIM
Thanks,
KIM
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January 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Think it very good. Looking for an update. Thanks
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January 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This is very, very good. I love Aurora, and your Snape. Your writing is also impressive: the words seem to flow so easily. Can't wait to see what happens next!
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January 14, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Just finished the last chapter, very good. Now you have left us hanging out here you have to finish it, give us more! Very interesting story, not the run of the mill and taking your time for the sex. Thanks,
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January 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Congratulations! 150+ hits already. I bet this is going to very soon become one of the most read fics-it deserves to be!!! Funny, sexy and smart.
Trisha
Trisha