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September 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Woah. This was really good! Loved the song...I was laughing so hard..
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July 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
If anybody want to have some fun - go and read this story! For what are you waiting?
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May 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well written. Your writing has a good flow to it, and i can tell you actually used a spellchecker (and/or a beta). Many brownie points for you!
My only thought is to work on your characterization, though this is a funny story and the characterization isn\'t as necessary as with a drama, or such. It\'s just fine in this instance, but if you were to write an angst, I\'d be careful.
OH and here\'s my suggestion for the strawberry lemonade (though yours is good, too, this is something I came up with while experimenting. We, southerners, enjoy our drinks as cold as possible):
Make lemonade as directed to begin with (lemonjuice & water, heated; add 3 cups sugar, not two). Chill the lemonade until it is cold enough to drink. Run a few cups of ice through a blender, OR, as i did, find frozen strawberries and run THOSE through a blender until you have a slush. Add lemonade.
Blackberries and raspberries work good, also-- frozen or thawed. And orange juice. Make a citrus slushy by adding lime and orange juice to your lemonade slush. Slushy slush slush sloosh. Goody goody gumdrops!
My only thought is to work on your characterization, though this is a funny story and the characterization isn\'t as necessary as with a drama, or such. It\'s just fine in this instance, but if you were to write an angst, I\'d be careful.
OH and here\'s my suggestion for the strawberry lemonade (though yours is good, too, this is something I came up with while experimenting. We, southerners, enjoy our drinks as cold as possible):
Make lemonade as directed to begin with (lemonjuice & water, heated; add 3 cups sugar, not two). Chill the lemonade until it is cold enough to drink. Run a few cups of ice through a blender, OR, as i did, find frozen strawberries and run THOSE through a blender until you have a slush. Add lemonade.
Blackberries and raspberries work good, also-- frozen or thawed. And orange juice. Make a citrus slushy by adding lime and orange juice to your lemonade slush. Slushy slush slush sloosh. Goody goody gumdrops!
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May 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Nay. NAY NEIGH. I take back everything I said about characterization. I shall die happily years from now with the mental image of professoress mcgonnogal (sp)clutching filch\'s family jewels. I shall die giggling like a schoolgirl, just as i am now. Teeheehee ;) love it, babes!
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April 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hehe! Fun. I loved the song bit. It reminded me of the musical episode of Buffy.... Great dialogue in the last part of the chapter!
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April 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was so funny, I loved that story. It was a little slow in the begining and I was tempted to quit but I\'m really glad that I didn\'t. I loved the idea of the N/G coupling and the H/D too. And the self-lubricating cucumber :oD Well done!!!!!!!
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March 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Poor McGonagall! You had me giggling so hard I almost peed in my pants. Great story, loved the ending. Hope you write some more!
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March 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh that was brilliant, just brilliant! One of the best Hermione/Snape stories I have ever read and I read plenty of them. The theme in someone else\'s hands might have become gross, but you kept it sexy and interesting. I don\'t even usually like Draco/Harry but I had to root for them here. And the lemons were terrific, very sensual. I could go on all day about all the great details, like Hooch and the broom, or all the great lines (Hello! Cunnilingus here!) but I won\'t... I\'ll just hope you write more stories.
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March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Frisky and funny! I enjoyed reading this fic, it made me smile during this bad weather I\'ve been having. Good job!
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG!! How utterly charming!! I have loved this story!! I have recommended it to me hubby. I know he\'ll get quite a kick from it! Excellent writing!! Can\'t wait for the next one!