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Hi... I\'m not meaning to be rude... but I\'m trying hard to read what appears to be a good fic... and well.. each and EVERY chapter up to 13 (I haven\'t gotten passed it) seems to have CHUNKS missing. It started small in chapter one with words or scentences missing. And now there are ENTIRE pieces of the story missing. Example: One minute Draco and Harry are cleaning the Chamber of Secrets... and then they are having sex on a bed! I have NO idea what happened... another example: Harry was about to step up tp pick his staff materials and suddenly he was picking wood! No mention at all of what jewl he got... its really mucking up a good fic! Please please see if you can fix it? Some of the chapters appear to end in the middle of a scene and then the next chapter will pic up in what seems like the middle of a new scene. Its kind of confusing. Also 13 just POOFS in the middle of a sentence it ends the chapter. Please let me know if it gets fixed. Thank yoU!!

Your missing part of the story on Chapter 7 Sorry to bother you I just wanted you to know. Also this is one of my favriote storys ever.

Nice work! It\'s a bit confusing with the changes in text all the time. Jumping from one scene to the next without page splits, but wonderful nonetheless!

I joined your group! It\'s taken me almost 24 hours (not all reading) but I\'ve finally finished your story! It\'s fantastic! Though there were a few times you switched scenes and it left me horribly confused. But I muddled through it. So chapter 33 won\'t be posted here? Will you send a note through the group?

you ROCK!!!!!

you ROCK!!!
this story so kicks ass!
i can\'t wait for the sequals
i plan on lokking up your site
i hope you post soon
could you please email me when you do
pretty please?
i would love to read the stories

oh my god!!! I love this story so much, and the ending is so so great. I can\'t wait to read the next part!

I think you are a very imaginative writer and I am enjoying where your story is going. That being said, it is fairly hard to read at times as I am stopped not only by spelling errors, but your using the wrong word (\'tomb\'-a grave when you mean \'tome\' a book, for instance) or a word in the wrong form of speech or just used incorrectly (\'abashed\' when I assume you mean \'accusingly\' or something like it). I got to the third chapter and just had to stop. I want to go back to the story, but I find it tiring to be reading and editing in my head at the same time. You need an editor or a beta reader. Your story is good and could be great but the errors are jarring. Because you are not a professional writer is not an excuse to not be careful, however it is one that way too many fan fiction writers use. Don\'t be one - you are too promising a writer not to be as careful as possible with your story. If you went to your friend\'s house [who was an amateur cook] for dinned shd she said \"I know I used some of the wrong ingrediants in the wrong proportions and cooked things at the wrong temperature but hey eat it anyway...\"would that be all right with you? I really really hope you think about what I have said, and as I say I do plan to go back to the story, I am looking forward to seeing where you are planning to take it. Gouck.uck.

My domain in the English language is very bad, I read your fic with help of a translator, that even and when it does not make it perfect, at least if it allows me to continue the idea of the history.

I congratulate you on the history, it is very good. I congratulate you also for being the person that you are, Franc, sincere, without folds. I admire your work as I admire the human being that you are. Without importing the sexual trends or the personal tastes, finally you are wonderful to the sincere being, besides the fact that you are an excellent writer. Soon I will recapture my courses of English to be able to enjoy your work in her original language.

I will continue reading your fic, so I will register to your group but please, a bit obliging with me, the Spanish is my native and alone language a bit of your language. I would like to be able to leave you a review that was reflecting the wonderful thing that makes me your fic, but doubt that there stays well the translation of this mail and then I prefer not committing a mistake.



In Spanish:

Mi dominio en el idioma ingles es muy malo, le

good writer. great writer. totally love this story. i especially like the way you solved the pansy problem. only hope draco will be ok with the slytherins and voldemort.

totally can\'t wait for the next. keep up the STUPENDOUS work.