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February 14, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Really enjoying the story. Please update soon.
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June 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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March 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
uhu, Starbucks? Umm yea that
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January 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Someone watched Die Hard before they wrote chapter for....God, that\'s my favorite image...Severus in a suit...yummy
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March 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Horrible. I couldn\'t even finish the second chapter. Why oh why did Hogsmeade sell out and have a Muggle coffee chain? This story just jumps right in and is very hard to follow. My suggestion is for you to read a lot of books, and notice how they actually build things up instead of just throwing them down on paper. You should also read the Harry Potter books and pay attention to the characterization of Hermione, or at least come up with a very plausible explanation as to why she would choose beauty over brains.
Abysmal fic.
Abysmal fic.
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February 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like the story--there are a lot of interesting concepts with this story line. But, for me that is a problem. There were too many holes in the story: you didn\'t really go into detail about Severus\'s niece, where Ron went and what happened to Minerva, and how Snape just showed up when she went downstairs. Yes, he could have been watching her, but it was just too faulty for it to happen that way. Then, they have sex only for Hermoine to kick him out after it was over--I thought that she had a big crush on him.
Anyway, there are a lot olesoles in the story that you need to clear up. Some of the things that happened seemed to be unplanned and it felt like they were just dropped into the story because you needed filler for the chapters. If anything, just plan out your chapter before you write it.
Anyway, there are a lot olesoles in the story that you need to clear up. Some of the things that happened seemed to be unplanned and it felt like they were just dropped into the story because you needed filler for the chapters. If anything, just plan out your chapter before you write it.
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February 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I did think this would be a campy kind of story, but it is coming across more dramatic. Interesting. Thanks.
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February 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m sure its not your intention, but I\'m just getting sad. I hope they get together soon. Thanks.
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February 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please make Snape confidegaingain soon! I feel so bad for the snarky guy. Great story so far...wasn\'t sure initially that I would like it, but I am loving it!!
Susan
Susan
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February 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Thar was sad. He gave her how many orgasms, and she just left without a word? Wake up Hermione.