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for Out of Harm\'s Way

by BrightColors

person arianwen
schedule October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Remus is not a pervert! Sigh. At least *I* don\'t think so;) More, pretty please?
person Loubie
schedule February 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is very sweet and fluffy. Please update:)
person Nee
schedule January 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Decent but the chapters are little more than paragraphs. All three of these could be one chapter.
person kimi
schedule December 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love your story, can\'t wait for another chapter!
person Anntar
schedule November 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Sweet. I like the idea of them spending some time together :) I can\'t wait to read more. I love Remus/Hermione fics.
person Tawney
schedule September 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very Cute I loved it, I am writing one too, on FF.NET. Keep it up and update soon!<3
person Bellaireland
schedule February 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I want to say that is a great start to a fic... I can\'t wait to read more.

About the formatting, I noticed you had no spaces between it. If you are uploading a htm document and it isn\'t working right, just upload it, then go to edit chapter. You can edit it and add in all the spaces. I have to do that with all my fics. Other than that, it\'s a great start!

Bella Ireland
person GlindaTrisstt
schedule February 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
A very interesting start. I like the \'two away from the world\' theme. I\'m looking forward to more.

That said, I would like to give some critical advice. Please go back and give your writing some breathing room. Spaces are a good thing ! It makes for a much more readable text. Every time someone speaks is a new paragraph and every new thought is a paragraph. Also make sure to let the reader know who is speaking. It is obvious to you because the scene is playing out in your head, but the reader does not alway know.

Other than that, the content is good and story looks to be going well.

Waiting for more .....

Glinda