rate_review Reviews

Minor continuity glitch. They met at the Hogsmeade Brewery and when the obnoxious family drove them out they went up Diagon Alley to Olivander\'s. Diagon Alley and Olivander\'s are in London, not Hogsmeade. They either needed to Apparate first, and have a reason for Hermione to accompany Lucius to Olivanderr\'s, or the meeting needed to be in the Diagon Alley locale instead of Hogsmeade in the first place. I think there was another one of these, but it did not stick. In any case I am very glad to see that you are back on this story. It has a very interesting premise and an excellent opening.

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I love this story, and was very happy to revisit it! Anyways, there are lots of weird mistakes, as if something had been messing with the script. Perhaps you could check the text. (I\'m on Chapter 2 currently, which is pretty full of them; there was at least 1 occurrence in Chapter 1 too)

Fantastic story; I\'m really enjoying it. I\'m so pleased that you finally updated it (and that you don\'t leave stories unfinished).

Great start on this fic!! I love how it doesn\'t follow the usual post-Voldie Ministry job...Oh, and it appears as if the Garbling Goblins have been attacking your story too, there are several stutters throughout the chapter.

I remember catching the very beginning of this at sycophanthex some months back and being intrigued. I happily re-discovered it through your recent pimping (OT, shocking!) at WIKTT. Having missed the original posting of the middle chapters, did the story undergo some damage when aff went down and got scrambled? Seems like chapters 3 and 4 may be missing bits, perhaps large bits. Right now, I have the gist of things, but I hate the idea of missing any of your witty writing. The characterization of both Hemione and Lucius is believable and is internally consistent even as it is explored in the story. *sighs* So wonderful to read your work.

Did I miss a chapter? There\'s a big party and Lucius is there?

Your story and your writing are completely new to me, not surprising considering the amount of time this story has been posted. However
I am intrigued with what I have read and look forward to more chapters to come.

You end the fanfic saying chapter 7 is cooking, 1 question:- Is it cooking in a slow cooker or on a fast grill?

Yippee another chapter! I do like this story. I love the subtle dialogue and the interactions between Hermione and Malfoy. It\'s interesting to see her as a mature woman. You\'ve managed the difficult task of making her grow up and mature whilst still remaining Hermione. It\'s also good to see someone taking pains to develop the story and the history.

Please keep updating!

I just came across this fic, very neat gem among the PWP smut.
Good pacing and interesting, I haven\'t gotten bored yet. Please keep
up with it!