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September 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hello! I read the entirety of The Rules of Engagement thus far last night, and reread the last few chapters this morning. Let me start by saying that I'm utterly taken with the story and cannot wait to read the rest. If you have some kind of email update list, please add me.
A few constructive criticisms, coming from someone who's an uber-grammar geek and reads things with an editors' eye: there are a few common mistakes you have, which wouldn't be caught by a spell checker (which, it appears, you either use, or don't need): "could of been" should be "could have been"; "don't overdue it" should be "don't overdo it", watch out for using "you're" instead of "your" (ask yourself, "Does it mean 'you are', or is it the possessive 'your'?"), and don't use apostrophes in plurals.
That said, the fact that you have those mistakes is largely overlookable because you don't display the concomitant tendency to mangle the mother tongue that usually goes hand-in-hand with those sorts of errors. Indeed, of all the (small handful of) authors I've read on this and other fanfic archives, you have by far and away the best command of the language and how to use it. Your writing is blessedly free of the patterns shown by those who do most of their reading online; when I say it looks remarkably book-like, I mean that as a high compliment.
Your original characters are delightful to read and nicely three-dimensional. Your use of JKR's characters is believable, though you occasionally put words in Snape's mouth that don't quite sound believable to me. Then again, we've never seen Snape in love in JKR's work, so one is necessary to suspend one's disbelief a bit.
Keep up the good work, and keep those chapters coming!
A few constructive criticisms, coming from someone who's an uber-grammar geek and reads things with an editors' eye: there are a few common mistakes you have, which wouldn't be caught by a spell checker (which, it appears, you either use, or don't need): "could of been" should be "could have been"; "don't overdue it" should be "don't overdo it", watch out for using "you're" instead of "your" (ask yourself, "Does it mean 'you are', or is it the possessive 'your'?"), and don't use apostrophes in plurals.
That said, the fact that you have those mistakes is largely overlookable because you don't display the concomitant tendency to mangle the mother tongue that usually goes hand-in-hand with those sorts of errors. Indeed, of all the (small handful of) authors I've read on this and other fanfic archives, you have by far and away the best command of the language and how to use it. Your writing is blessedly free of the patterns shown by those who do most of their reading online; when I say it looks remarkably book-like, I mean that as a high compliment.
Your original characters are delightful to read and nicely three-dimensional. Your use of JKR's characters is believable, though you occasionally put words in Snape's mouth that don't quite sound believable to me. Then again, we've never seen Snape in love in JKR's work, so one is necessary to suspend one's disbelief a bit.
Keep up the good work, and keep those chapters coming!
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September 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I have just read all 27 chapters in one night, its a wonderful sttory, PLEASE! update soon
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September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
wonderfully done chapter! i really loved the scene where he was about to say i love you but didnt...really emotional. i also really liked the bit between annya and tonks...wow.
Thank you SO much for posting. i've been dying for more! thanks!
Thank you SO much for posting. i've been dying for more! thanks!
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September 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Glinda rocks!!!
I love your work!! Excellent! :-)
I love your work!! Excellent! :-)
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September 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love this story!!! Are you going to have Annya and Remus fall in love? That would be awesome! Please continue soon!!
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September 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love it, as always!!!! hehe, I wonder if it's true that a wizard's seed is more than a Muggles... hehehe...
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September 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this fic is so awesome, i love reading the updates. your so right on with your characterizations. maybe they're not exact. but they are exactly what i like them to be. severus is good and noble and antisocial, just a little tarnished. hermione is in control, strong, not a radical feminist, but a comfortable modern women, with a bit of teenage hormones thrown in to keep things interesting. love this fic. i can hardly wait for the wedding an for lucius to make his move. so great!
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September 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Definitely an addictive story you have here. I just spent all day reading it. I can't wait to see what happens next! ^_^
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August 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please write more I miss this fic
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August 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very much enjoying their relationship with Lupin...I've always felt a bit bad that there seems to be such a distance between Snape and Lupin, because Remus seems to be a genuinely nice guy and he's one of my other fave characters. Very nicely done! ~HR