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the latest chapter needs to be betad - mostly for errors in punctuation. Also, you may want to consider adding more \"it\'s\" and the like, instead of \"it is,\" which can sound too formal. The plot is still good and I really do like this story. This chapter just didn\'t seem up to par with the previous ones. Probably burned out from thsts sts I\'m sure!

ooh pleeeeeeeease can Snape & Harry get together? and someone nice for neville, he\'s a sweetie!

hope u did good on your exams. great chapter. please please update soon!!!

Don\'t feel bad, I\'ve actually gotten caught in the differences between American and British English. I never knew there was such a variation (other than accent).

As far as cliffhangers are concerned, unless you\'ve pre-planned them, any story will have natural breaks in the action. Not really the author\'s fault.

So far I have enjoyed this story, and have no complaints.

See you around... from New York State!

Tell you what I think? BRILLIANT! ^_^ MORE! XD Please! Or I\'ll die and haount you for eternity! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! XD

This story just gets better and better. I also like the way you write Severus. He\'s very real - very strong and somewhat amoral by the usual standards but true to his oVeryVery sexy.

Hi!
I just wanted to know that i really like your story and where its going. it is great. if you ever want a beta to fix up ur (very few) grammar errors just let me know. update soon- i can\'t wait to see what will happen.

Sweet... dark... sensual...

I can\'t wait for more. It\'s one of the best I\'ve read.

Hi, have you given up on this story? If you have please contact must ust so I don\'t keepckincking it. I hope you do continue though, I love your style of writing.
xxxDi

Nicely done! And thank you Very much for the peek into Sev\'s POV!!! It really helps keep my interest, at least, in the story, to see what the POV\'s are of the different main characters in the fic...seeing if it as a train wreck in the making (& I\'m caught watching, while mumbling \'oh no!\'), or watching as they dance around each other, determining their strategy and best approach (and I\'m urging them on---Go For It! And, my what Fun watching the plotting reach completion) But, pardon the pun, Severus sure \'got off\' awfully easy--- 1 blow job for a life debt? How about re-interpreting that, and surprising Harry with a complete set of lessons? I do like the idea of him seducing Harry slowly, though, so that by the time he is taking it up the arse/butt, he\'s thoroughly ensnared by Sev in all aspects, loving the sensual & sexual experience, but also having learned the Slytherin POV, not just the Gryffindor interpretations of life\'s lessons. And having grown to sympathise/understand/ally himself with them. I guess I also wanted to know Sev\'s \'intentions\', so I know whether I want to continue reading. And it seems that you have answered that queation: Sev is finding that he is growing to care for Harry, quite a lot. This fic is quite well-written, and intrigueing, but I only want to keep reading if I know that there\'s a \'happy ending\', \'cuz I hate having my heart broken at the end. --- I know I\'m sappy, but I Hate the idea of Sev Completly Betraying and Using Harry, without it turning around into him loving Harry also. I\'m OK with him playing with Harry at first, as long as he gets caught in his own trap, as well by, or preferably, well before the end---then I get to watch as the goal and strategy changes and the stakes become more intense. I like it when he finds that the little game he thought he was playing has turned into something quite a lot more for him, and he wants to keep it and make it moreso! So, along with that admission, I am enjoying this fic even moreso, as it seems to be turning in that direction. Please do warn me, tho\', if you\'re going to turn it the mean, heartbreaking direction---I\'ll leave that for others to read. Sorry, I know thaose can be very worthwhile, excellent stories, too--just not my cuppa. And thanks also for your author notes--- They help allay any ocncerns. That wouldn\'t be necessary, except that so many of the excellent fics in this fandom turn into never-finished WOP\'s, and that is so frustrating. It is good to knjow that you are commited to finishing the fic, just busy with RL at times. Thanks, great fic! And eagerly awaitiong more!