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Great story so far! I just found this yesterday, and I spent a couple of hours reading it until I finished it up. Are you going to be going over each year and every major event therein? It\'s an interesting approach seeing how Snape and Hermione\'s relationship develops. I\'m looking forward to seeing how it goes. It\'s very well written and definitely a good read! Just curious (and please don\'t take this the wrong way) - is there any way you could put a space between paragrapo tho that it is a little easier to read? I understand if you wouldn\'t have enough room to post the chapter intact doing that, but it would definitely help with the reading. Also, I wanted to say that you for not using the ** to emphasize words near as much in the later chapters. It really undermines your work.

Aside from that - fantabulous work, darling! Keep up the good work and UPDATE SOON!!!

I just wanted to add your characterizations are fantastic. You have Snape down to a T! I can totally sympathize with Hermione. When I was her age, I was too old for my age and madly in love with one of my professors, too. Nothing happened, unfortunately, but we did have a connection. Unfortunately my family moved away a year or two later, and I haven\'t seen him since. It\'s been 10 years, and I still think about him occasionally and wonder what might have been.

Okay, sorry for that trip into Maudlin-ville. We all have our ghosts! :) Great story, hon. Keep it up!!!

Another excellent chapter, though I wish it were a bit longer. I love the retelling of the story through these two different perspectives.

I\'m a bit behind here, sorry about that!!!

Chapter 13... Yet another WONDERFUL chapter my dear!!! I think 1 of my favorite things about your story is that you put enough in it to know at which point you are at in relation to the books, but you bring out what we weren\'t shown of these 2 characters!!! I know that the books are about & based on Harry, but in already knowing that aspect of things it is nice to have a story built around a pair that I adore!!!

As always I will be watching for your next update*

Hi! I\'ve only read the first chapter so far, so I can\'t say much of the story yet, but it\'s already a very promising start.
But still, there\'s something that was bothering me, while I read it. You write \"the sunlight, he\'s been captivated by all night\".
Sorry, but did I miss something? Since when\'s sunlight shining at night?
Oh, and you write something about appareting out of his rooms. As Hermione always says \"You can\'t apperate at Hogwarts\". ;-)
And before I forget, I\'d really recommend you to reformate your story. It\'s pretty hard to focus on such a flow of words without a stop or something like that in between.
But keep the story coming. It\'s good (as far as I know yet). :-)

Hi! Me again. The formatting is better in this chapter, I guess, but there\'s another thing I noticed (sorry, if I\'m annoying).
If Hermione\'s only four month at this school, as you say rather in the end of \"The Girl, who strives\", then they can\'t have Care of magical creatures on wednesday, because that\'subjeubject they only got in their third year.

Wow, this is... amazing... however, it\'s killing my eyes to read it, the formatting is just painful. Just give a line of space between your paragraphs, and you\'ll be good to go. Seriously, this is a great story, and all you need (that I can say) is to fix the formatting. Everything else, your descriptions, your characterizations, your pacing... it\'s all great. Thank you fakinaking the time to write this, and I apologise if I\'ve given any offense.

This is a very richly detailed story, which are by far my favorite kind. If I were looking for an imperfection, the only thing I would change would be to ask that you include more paragraph breaks. It\'s a bit difficult to read on the screen. Other than that, I think that you have a terrific work here and I ookiooking forward to your next update.
K~

I\'m with the others here - it\'s a fantastic story and great to see how their relationship develops, but....get rid of that Bella girl!! Yes, Severus needs human touch, etc...but leave it out of this story - or leave it out where the prostitute is concerned - Bella is bad news and she will always have a hidden agenda where Severus is involved.

This story looks very intriguing however I find it very hard to read. Could you maybe go back and seperate the chapters please. It would make it easier on the eyes