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for A Terrible Temptation

by Barrie

person deblovesdragon
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
AWWW! They screwed like little bunny rabbits. It was so sweet. (Just being a little sarky... menstral crankiness.)
It was well worth the wait. Hermione seemed happy with it. Severus seemed more than happy too. I loved how Hermione stayed Miss Bossy-Boots during the lovemaking and barked orders. Very Hermione.
I loved your line about the unimaginative writer and the soap opera that had been their courtship. I personally think you have plenty of imagination Barrie.
Cheers luv!
person Adriana
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I had to read both chapters twice, they were so good! This was certainly worth the long wait . . . I love emotionally uplifting sex scenes, LOL. By the way, I howled at this:

person Shinigami
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ah.. the lemons... *speechless*

I ended up laughing with the \'lessons\'... that part I like very much, wonder what the other lessons are. I feel pity to Ron\'s and Victor\'s future wives too... Hermione was very frustrated... and here I thought she\'s the virgin.. LOL, Griffyndor\'s courage indeed.

Anyway, I wonder why Dumbledore didn\'t do anything... don\'t other people in that place botherir air attention elsewhere? I was wondering if you\'re going to end it here though.

I tip my hat to you and your beta, a job well done these two later chapters. *grins*
person Droxy
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
So many reviews I feel I will get lost in the accolades.

Very mutli-layered lemons here, nicely done.



person Bambu
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
When you write lemons, you write LEMONS. Wow!
person Deb >^..^< .
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Chapters 41 & 42... AMAZING, BEAUTIFUL, SENSUAL, DEMANDING, FANTASTIC, INCREDIBLE.... there are so many more words that could be used to describe this which was WELL WORTH THE WAIT!!! HOLY MY,se 2se 2 chapters were PERFECTLY FABULOUS!!! I so love the way that they meld together!!! There is so much caring & love, not to mention the introduction of Hermione, call me Miss Demanding, Granger!!!

I LOVE this story & if you haven\'t figured that out by now, my reviews must really suck;-) THANK YOU for putting up these 2 chapters tonight!!! Til chpater 43, Deb >^..^<
person influenza1918
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You probably don\'t want to hear criticism...I\'m sure you don\'t. Let me say that I think this is a wonderful story and that you are a very gifted writer. Please, please don\'t get upset with me.

I don\'t like the cat animagus thing. To me, it feels like a secondary plot in an otherwise beautiful story - like something tacked on. Isn\'t everything complex and wonderfulugh ugh without having to introduce a new contrivance? It just feels *wrong* to me, and I think the story would be better off without.

Love the lemons, love your writing, love your depiction of the characters. I *especially* love the Ron/Severus friendship...how rare in fanfic. Just don\'t like the cats.
person Evanescence
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I have no words to describe this. I have goosebumps all along my arms, it was that good. Not just the consummation/act of finally getting to it, because s fas far more than that. You infused this with so much \"true\" emotion and feeling that it makes the reader reel.

Absolutely bloody fantastic,

- Eva
person e
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
your lemons were loverly, dear. your entire story is amazing and you keep outdoing yourself every chapter
xoxo
...me...
person nesscafe
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear writer, that was so beautiful! That was so romantic and yet steamy at the same time! Well done!