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February 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I completey hate that you\'ve made me love this story! Great plot!! I can\'t wait for Malfoy Sr. to finally realize that Voldemort and his cohorts tortured Laylani. I\'m so worried that Ginny is going to do something stupid and completely ruin her chances with Harry. I do like that Draco isn\'t suddenly Mr. Nice to everyone, it\'s much more realistic. I\'m usually a big HG/SS or HG/DM shipper. This is the first OFC that I\'ve liked. Terrific story! I look for subsequent chapters.
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January 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is a really good story, I just read all chapters and was intrigued by your telltale twists. It is good and I like your original character, so many things of her lifetime and reactions are very real. Even when some are heartwrenching, but real.
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January 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is such a wonderful story!! It\'s so nice to see something starring Draco that isn\'t a dirty smut fic. I\'m really loving the Lani character too...not your typical Mary-Sue! You\'ve done so much with character and plot development...it\'s great. I can\'t wait for more, but I\'m so anxious to see what happens when the Malfoys find out about who REALLY took Lani. For that matter, I want to know which death eater it is that actually did the kidnapping. Anyways, loved it, update soon!
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January 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Stay the course!! I absolutely love your story. You\'ve done such a wonderful job on character developement. Laylani\'s character is wonderful. Please let them be happy! When dofindfind out who kidnapped her? I\'m curious! Keepthe the good work.
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January 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Don\'t just please\'t.\'t...let Laylani have some pease.
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January 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OH MY GOD!
I can\'t believe I haven\'t read this chapter yet! It was so fabulous! So dramatic and emotional! I am teary eyed with many mixed emotions here at the end. My feelings at first were joy that, regardless of (exciting, horrible, spicing-up-plot) calamities happening around Hogwarts, everything was good with Draco and Laylani and he was writing her letters. The Quidditch mawas was exciting, but I was apprehensive about Harry\'s staring at Laylani--reminded me too much of his silly obsession over Cho, whom I am not so fond of at all as of HP 5.
I am thrilled that Laylani passed her test and got into Hogwarts! That is so cool! I only wish that you had written some details of what questions were asked and what amazing things Laylani must have done with her wandless magic. I like that you made her not so good at Potions, because that means Draco can help and and not EVERY Slytherin is a Potion whiz, so that is realisitic to make her bad at some school subjects.
I did not like the drinking. I have written sin min my fics, but really, drinking is horrible. But again, it is a realistic, understandable touch. Drinking is a typical way of celebrating.
Lots of cusswords. Realistic when drinking. I thought at first the emotions changing so quickly and felt so extremely in Laylani and Draco\'s argument was odd, but then, hey, drink can do that to people, so I suppose it makes sense. I am very sad and angry about Laylani and Draco\'s argument, and especially the horrible things Draco to to Laylani.
Oh, one part I liked in the beginning of the chapter was when it said how Laylani had said Draco an almost-Howler, and after saying what her angry letter said (about how it scared the hell out of her and the next time he did it he\'d find himself on the wrong end of a wand about to hex him), then, in Draco\'s thoughts, the chapter said \"Gods, how he loved her.\" Funny how, even after that almost howler and everything, he thinks how he loves her. Very Malfoy and Slytherin like, that type of humor.
I think how Laylani became friends with Harry and how he comforted her was very sweet, and cute. I almost got that warmish feeling, but then hello, I said to myself, this is about DRACO and Laylani, what am I thinking??!!! So then I just got worried. Laylani has made friends with Harry, she had a fight with Draco, and Draco regrets what he said now but it will be hard thing to remedy, plus Harry and Draco are total enemies! So I am angry about the Harry situation because Harry might wreck things, unintentionally (or intentionally!) between Draco and Laylani, aet Iet I\'m also glad Laylani has someone as a FRIEND, and not just a more-than-friend, like Draco (was! Augh!), or parentish people like Mr. and Mrs. Malfoy. So I\'m glad Laylani has a friend but I\'m worried tht\'st\'s Harry and I\'m worried about the Draco/Laylani situation.
On to the next chapter!
I can\'t believe I haven\'t read this chapter yet! It was so fabulous! So dramatic and emotional! I am teary eyed with many mixed emotions here at the end. My feelings at first were joy that, regardless of (exciting, horrible, spicing-up-plot) calamities happening around Hogwarts, everything was good with Draco and Laylani and he was writing her letters. The Quidditch mawas was exciting, but I was apprehensive about Harry\'s staring at Laylani--reminded me too much of his silly obsession over Cho, whom I am not so fond of at all as of HP 5.
I am thrilled that Laylani passed her test and got into Hogwarts! That is so cool! I only wish that you had written some details of what questions were asked and what amazing things Laylani must have done with her wandless magic. I like that you made her not so good at Potions, because that means Draco can help and and not EVERY Slytherin is a Potion whiz, so that is realisitic to make her bad at some school subjects.
I did not like the drinking. I have written sin min my fics, but really, drinking is horrible. But again, it is a realistic, understandable touch. Drinking is a typical way of celebrating.
Lots of cusswords. Realistic when drinking. I thought at first the emotions changing so quickly and felt so extremely in Laylani and Draco\'s argument was odd, but then, hey, drink can do that to people, so I suppose it makes sense. I am very sad and angry about Laylani and Draco\'s argument, and especially the horrible things Draco to to Laylani.
Oh, one part I liked in the beginning of the chapter was when it said how Laylani had said Draco an almost-Howler, and after saying what her angry letter said (about how it scared the hell out of her and the next time he did it he\'d find himself on the wrong end of a wand about to hex him), then, in Draco\'s thoughts, the chapter said \"Gods, how he loved her.\" Funny how, even after that almost howler and everything, he thinks how he loves her. Very Malfoy and Slytherin like, that type of humor.
I think how Laylani became friends with Harry and how he comforted her was very sweet, and cute. I almost got that warmish feeling, but then hello, I said to myself, this is about DRACO and Laylani, what am I thinking??!!! So then I just got worried. Laylani has made friends with Harry, she had a fight with Draco, and Draco regrets what he said now but it will be hard thing to remedy, plus Harry and Draco are total enemies! So I am angry about the Harry situation because Harry might wreck things, unintentionally (or intentionally!) between Draco and Laylani, aet Iet I\'m also glad Laylani has someone as a FRIEND, and not just a more-than-friend, like Draco (was! Augh!), or parentish people like Mr. and Mrs. Malfoy. So I\'m glad Laylani has a friend but I\'m worried tht\'st\'s Harry and I\'m worried about the Draco/Laylani situation.
On to the next chapter!
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January 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
no no and hell no!!! don\'t let voldemort get her again! oh I love the story :} update! damn lucius just had to open up his big mouth! aaahhhhhhhhhh! sorry lol
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January 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I am SO tempted to be a squealy ditz and shriek \"EEK!\"
But I won\'t.
Instead, I will....shriek AUGH! OH MY GOD!
This chapter...guh! Breathtaking! I am beyond relieved that Draco and Laylani made up. The letter she sent him was..oh, there are no words! Saddening, and horrifying, at the least. I like that her surge of power made that nasty guy get a lesson. Draco\'s words of love to Laylani in apology, in the letter, and when he came to the Manor at night, were beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. Never have I seen in a fic an author make Draco\'s character into such a romantic, lovely, charming person. And you have done this so well, in fact, that it is not out of character! For some reason, regardlof aof all we have seen of Slytherinesque, nasty, annoying Draco in Canon, and SexGod!Draco in Fanon, usually a Draco as sweet as yours (or should I say Laylani\'s) is out of character. But you have managed to make it utterly believable, and totally satisfying to read about in this incredible fic of yours. I would like to thank you for that.
The morning scene was hilarious. Narcissa yelling, and everything. I also like the smutty hints as Draco went to bed with her.
Oh, the smut. Good job on it! I can never write het smut like that. Slash smut, yet, but I find het smut impossible to write. You did fabulous, though. You wrote it...appealingly. Usually, in my opinion, it is not, because there is always that niggling doubt of \"Okay, is this how sex sex is supposed to go?\" and there are so many view of het sex. You wrote it well. Congrats!
This was a great chaptbecabecause it threw me back and forth in emotions, from worried about Draco and Laylani\'s argument, to happy that they had made up, to worried about the traumas Laylani went through, to happy Draco was with her and she was more physically and mentally open with him, to even happier at the smutty scenes and the fact that it was so sweet and all was well between Draco and Laylani, to absolutely DEVASTATED that Lucius still has Voldemort-related dark plans for Laylani, and that Voldemort seems to KNOW about her (you will not escape us he said, eek!), and even MORE devastated that I must wait for who-knows-how-long until I get to read the next chapter!
Oh, the agony of cliffhangers! Have I ever felt it so sourly as at the end of chapter 10 of \"Dragon Child\'s Bride\" ? I think not!
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
But I won\'t.
Instead, I will....shriek AUGH! OH MY GOD!
This chapter...guh! Breathtaking! I am beyond relieved that Draco and Laylani made up. The letter she sent him was..oh, there are no words! Saddening, and horrifying, at the least. I like that her surge of power made that nasty guy get a lesson. Draco\'s words of love to Laylani in apology, in the letter, and when he came to the Manor at night, were beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. Never have I seen in a fic an author make Draco\'s character into such a romantic, lovely, charming person. And you have done this so well, in fact, that it is not out of character! For some reason, regardlof aof all we have seen of Slytherinesque, nasty, annoying Draco in Canon, and SexGod!Draco in Fanon, usually a Draco as sweet as yours (or should I say Laylani\'s) is out of character. But you have managed to make it utterly believable, and totally satisfying to read about in this incredible fic of yours. I would like to thank you for that.
The morning scene was hilarious. Narcissa yelling, and everything. I also like the smutty hints as Draco went to bed with her.
Oh, the smut. Good job on it! I can never write het smut like that. Slash smut, yet, but I find het smut impossible to write. You did fabulous, though. You wrote it...appealingly. Usually, in my opinion, it is not, because there is always that niggling doubt of \"Okay, is this how sex sex is supposed to go?\" and there are so many view of het sex. You wrote it well. Congrats!
This was a great chaptbecabecause it threw me back and forth in emotions, from worried about Draco and Laylani\'s argument, to happy that they had made up, to worried about the traumas Laylani went through, to happy Draco was with her and she was more physically and mentally open with him, to even happier at the smutty scenes and the fact that it was so sweet and all was well between Draco and Laylani, to absolutely DEVASTATED that Lucius still has Voldemort-related dark plans for Laylani, and that Voldemort seems to KNOW about her (you will not escape us he said, eek!), and even MORE devastated that I must wait for who-knows-how-long until I get to read the next chapter!
Oh, the agony of cliffhangers! Have I ever felt it so sourly as at the end of chapter 10 of \"Dragon Child\'s Bride\" ? I think not!
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
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January 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i knew it! i knew it was death eaters!
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January 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I love your story, it is awesome. YOu have a great beta reader, and thanks to the beta reader, from me. Great job. Please email me when you update. This is an awesome story, I hope that Draco and Lani can work things out. Please??? well have to go. peace. Gilthoniel