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OH MY GOSH!! had had so much emotion. So much... much... The way that... I\'m sorry, it was soo good that my brain has short-circuted. I don\'t think I\'ll ever be the same again. But it was good. The best. Wonderful. Perfect. Magnificent. Stupendous. Mind-blowing. Heavenly.

What a beautiful story!!!! I loved every minute of it, even when he took her by force. One of my favorites, definitely!!!!!!!

So does that mean he loves Ginny? Doesn\'t seem right but that\'s what I get from the last line. I will admit that your story made me cry, I\'m not too big to admit to being a blubbery kind of person. It was really very good. Overall, good grammer, and expessive story telling. One complaint though is your use of repetitive words. Sometimes you would use force or forcefully more than once in the same sentence (sometimes three times), and not in parallel stucture either so it made for less interesting reading, not to mention it\'s not a good creative writing habit. You did this with the word full or fill (can\'t rememwhicwhich one) and some others, but I was distracted by the plot and the moving preformance between H and M.

Loverly Job,
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