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for Unrequited

by gammiepie

person deblovesdragon
schedule December 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I liked chapter 5. The fact that they thought to do things for one another (even with dubious intentions) was cool. And I liked how you had them know each other\'s preferences - maybe they thought about the other before the conquest began.
Keep writing please.
person R/Hr sucks
schedule December 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Nice story.

Though I had to skip some parts in the first chapter. The R/Hr sex scene to be exact.

I *shudder* whenever I read a R/Hr sex scene.

Love D/Hr.
person Ashley
schedule December 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Alright, I had to do it. I have to comment.

I love the little game of cat and mouse that\'s being played. Both think they are the hunters but are actually the hunted. Both think they have the upper hand only to find they\'ve been one upped. I love that they are being kept on their toes by the other. Hermione, as you said in the beginning, is a little out of character, but I don\'t mind at all. She\'s all saucy, which is what I believe Draco could bring out in her anyway. I think this is a refreshing change from all the other fics that throw the same Hermione and Draco together. He wants her but he doesn\'t want her. She wants him and is going after him, if for nothing else but a shag. Despite what anyone else might think, I don\'t mind the Ron/Hermione thing because if it weren\'t for his jealousy over that then he might not have even cared about what she did or who she did it with. I love it. I love every part of this. Your writing style is amazing and I can\'t wait to read the next part.
person Fiery Slut
schedule December 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
chap 3:

Ooooh
person cookie35
schedule December 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
yup! that was definitely delicious! hahaha! please update! i really love your portrayal of draco! hardcore hermione is great by the way! please update!
person Deb >^..^< .
schedule December 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Just finished reading chapters 1-3....... I like this so far!!! Draco is still nasty, but I\'m sure he would change his tune a bit if he wants her that badly!!!

Are you going to tell later on what it was that Ron did over the summer or can we assume that Mr. Horndog was caught cheating on her then too?

Looking forward to your next update, Deb >^..^<
person SlytherinLinzi
schedule December 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful.

Absolutely wonderful!

I love the way you write Draco. Excellent!
person Mel
schedule December 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
*jaw drop* And... Why haven\'t I read this yet??? DAMN its good!! :-D
person Deb >^..^< .
schedule December 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4........ I LOVE IT!!! Hermione has decided to take the upper hand!!! Sounds like Draco is more than interested in that path!!! Can\'t say that I feel sorry for Ron, he deserves to be shunned for a bit after what he did!!! Can\'t wait to see what Hermione has up her sleeve the next time Draco comes around!!! Til chapter 5, Deb >^..^<
person JennaSlytherin
schedule December 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I love this! why do I have this sneaking feeling that Draco will do ANYTHING to make herms his??? :)