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Oh! ::gets all weepy and misty eyed:: Thank goodness you intend to write more! As I began to draw closer to the end of this one I actually started to get anxious! ::does a happy dance!:: I CAN\'T WAIT to see what you have planned for them next! Every time I thought I knew what was going on you quite unceremoniously dumped me onto my ass, leaving me wondering what in the hjustjust happened. As I\'ve told you before, your story (LLPL) was the first HP fan fic I\'ve read, and I quite honestly think you have completely spoiled me for the rest. And since I can never possibly be happy reading anyone else\'s work, you must take pity on me and WRITE, WRITE, WRITE!!!

VeresnaUssep,
I am completely addicted to your work.
This story is remarkably well written. The plot is well constructed with quite a few surprises (end of Ch. 29 for example). Your characterization of Snape is ideal and he is well mated by your creation Helena. I

Hot damn. You packaged up all my favorite ideas and tied them with a bow. Thank you!!! (and please, write another sequel!)

I am bad, because I've been reading your work for about a week now and this is the first review I've left. I can condence though, when I tell you that all of your stories are marvelous! I too have a hopeless facination with Snape and rarely come accross such a wickedly accurate and well drawn characterization of the character. You see in him, the potential that JKR has imbued him with and take it to the next level. Oh, and that next level is ever so delicious.

I find it interesting that women like me (and I suspect you as well) that have a strong sense of self and inner strength, are helplessly facinated by this side of Snape. I imagine it has something to do with the fact that it is rare to find a man who would take this type of (or even close to) initiative. Your character can be nasty, he can be downright domineering, but he remains human. With tenderness, consideration and a slight hint of vulnerability mixed in witht that arrogantly and well deserved sexual confidence, your Severus is darkly sexy and extremely compelling.

Thank you for sharing your work. I'm onlychapchapter 2 of your Helen sequel, and I'm planning on savoring the next 45 odd chapters or so. LOL, luckily for me, you seem to be highly prolific. Long may Severus serve as your muse!

Monique

Someone reccommended your story about the encounter with the pro, and liking that I read the rest of your stuff.

I found Secretly Syltherin fascinating enough to read it in one sitting. A couple of chapters dragged a fraction, There's only so much sex I can take, but that's personal preference.

I liked the way they are matched, and the different ways they thougt of to out do each other. The only quibble I have is that considering the ways he tends to trick her, nasty things that strike at her in undermining ways, I think she trusts him way too much. And too quickly. I suppose he does show concern early enough, and she is naturally attracted to him, and she is angry at him a lot, but it still seems a little off. The deep distrust/fear shown in small ways that I'd expect doesn't seem to be there. I can't quite buy the sex drive overcoming the self preservation.

That said, by the end they have generated the trust, the bit with "kill me" was excellent. And I do like Dumbledore pulling Snape up, be interesting to see more of that relationship.

I'd like to see more of your writing.

I can not admit to myself that this fiction is complete...I will not admit it to myself. It has been so much fun to follow this story and watch how a character like Snape deals with som he he clearly underestimated from the first, and I hate to think that there could be nothing more to come. I first found the story on fanfiction.net, and then followed it here when it was forced to be edited. And now, after all that, it could be over??!! Oh Please NOooo! Well, whatever happens, it has been a great read and I thank you for that!!!

LOVE IT! Awesome, intelligent story/plot and really well-written. Complicated, but everything seems to fit together perfect It It seems like you never forget a detail -- if you mention it in one chapter, it WILL be significant later. I think you got Snape's character dead on. I agree completely with your assessment of him: I think he is frustrated and vengeful, full of thwarted ambition, and that, yes, he does indeed get satisfaction out of being a bastard. But we still love him. (And, boy, should he be grateful to you and Helena for all the great sex!) I really thought the chapter in whic tes tested Helena's loyalties (re the Dark Mark) and gave sadistic explanations was one of your best. I kept thinking, "No, he wouldn't do that; no, he wouldn't . . . well, maybe he would!" You could have convinced me either way, it was so well-done. Your Malfoy is really scary-bad, too. I've heard great things about *Secretly Slytherin* all over the internet, but it's even better than I dared to hope. Really enjoyed it and read it all in just three sittings. Just couldn't stop. (Really liked *Don't Lie To Me* and *Love's Labours, Paradise Lost,* too.) You are a wonderful writer and I will make a point to read anything you post. Please write that sequel!

Please, please write a sequel! This is the best NC-17 story I've read! Your plot is really good, and I want to know what happens!More! More!

I'm not a slow reader. But I had to read your story slowly, *study it*, if you prefer the term, amazed of the way you weave your sentences. Especially when you describe the characters' emotions and facial expressions, I feel I'm reading poetry. Being a writer myself, I can understand how hard this can be. (It's harder for me, since English is not my primary language). And this makes your story stand out from the mediocre adolescent fiction that dominates FanFiction. Thi This too can be rea reading, of course, but sometimes you need to read something of a higher standard, like your story.

I also enjoyed the way you develop you characters. Helena is enchanting, and I was happy to see you've kept Snape close to character. The dialogue among them was fast and witty, and several of their remarks brought to mind R. Atkinson's "Black Adder" series and it's venomous sense of humor. I'm not really fond of the sex scenes in general, and some of them were too lengthy for my taste, but it suits in your story perfectly.

One more detail I enjoyed, one that few people notice, as far as I know, is your well-chosen chapter titles. I found myself chuckling at most of this, especially "Is that what beds are for?"

Overall, I have to sais his has been the best story I've read so far.

Well, well, well. Ol' Snapey is truely trapped. Malfoy is a cunning bastard for sure. Still the last few chapters were a little, wanting. No hot steamy nasty sex. Whine, moan.

I really liked the touch about Grandma and I bet she knew what Lucius was planning. And it makes the sex with Helena on Lucius' part all the more, well, yukky. I still wouldn't put it past him to try again, and again. And what about Draco? How will he react knowing he has an older sibling? Sibling rivalry? Warm fuzzies? Attempted rape? And Snape is about to be his new brother-in-law. Must be mind blowing for a tender teenager. That sould be a fun scene to write, for sure. The baby-power-leaching thing is great, fits in well with dark magic. Just the thing for old Voldy to try as a lark. But I bet it also leaches energy from the parents as well, t let least the mother. Just strikes me that way.

Please keep it updated, this saga has a life of it's own, and it's way too good to abandon. Make it an AU and keep going, because Helena is way too distinctive to let slip away. And more nasty steamy hot sex, please.