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August 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love your Stories and particularly this one!! Just discovered them this weekend and couldn`t get my eyes off them. Your Snape is just the way I think he is (and just the way I want him *g*), not the fluffy, sickeningly OOC kind of guy most female writers try to let him become and your female OC`s are the perfect mixture of being stubborn and having their own mind and sometimes... well, being lack of a better word (no native speaker, y`know), let`s say submissive... ;-)))
Thanks for your incredible writing!
Mandragora
Thanks for your incredible writing!
Mandragora
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December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please! Dinish the rest of the story!!!!! I like it!
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November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First of all, I loved this! It\'s sexy and clever, and the sex scenes have just the right amount of description to be tasty without being gratuitous or out of character.
Second, you need not have any worries about a Mary Sue. Although Helena does fit a few of the characteristics-- an unusual name; eyes that change colour-- she\'s attractive and intelligent without seeming as if she\'d be endowed with superpowers, or in any way related to the Veela. Plus, my boyfriend\'s eyes change from hazel to green, and mine, from ordinary blue to pallid grey or electric blue. Had she possessed irises capable of transforming from dicoloured blue and brown to bright violet, I may have stopped reading immediately...but no such problem there.
Although I tend not to read fanfictions containing outside characters, not only for fear of encountering a garish self-insertion, but also because I often feel they detract from the canon characters and the canon universe, I thought Helena fit in very well in the Hogwarts environment. A good choice, because while this story might have been a fun read if it had starred Hermione or another female student, it would seem out of character...plus, I don\'t like stories that force the characters to age unnaturally. In this case, you can make your protagonist any age you like, without having to potentially mis-characterise a younger canon character.
If I have any criticism at all, it is that the dream sequences are a little difficult to seperate from the rest of the story. At first, this may have been your intention-- to throw the two together, and then have her wake up at the last moment. However, I had a little trouble differentiating between her dreams and reality until I had read a few paragraphs into each segment. I, personally, would find it better if the dream sequences were obvious (the old \"oh, thank god, it was only a dream!\" ending is a little trite these days), but it\'s your story, and up to you.
Snape was excellently written-- perfectly in character for himself. I really loved his smug and sarcastic remarks about her drawing being incorrect, it was a nice touch.
Overall, it was a great story, and I enjoyed it throughout.
Second, you need not have any worries about a Mary Sue. Although Helena does fit a few of the characteristics-- an unusual name; eyes that change colour-- she\'s attractive and intelligent without seeming as if she\'d be endowed with superpowers, or in any way related to the Veela. Plus, my boyfriend\'s eyes change from hazel to green, and mine, from ordinary blue to pallid grey or electric blue. Had she possessed irises capable of transforming from dicoloured blue and brown to bright violet, I may have stopped reading immediately...but no such problem there.
Although I tend not to read fanfictions containing outside characters, not only for fear of encountering a garish self-insertion, but also because I often feel they detract from the canon characters and the canon universe, I thought Helena fit in very well in the Hogwarts environment. A good choice, because while this story might have been a fun read if it had starred Hermione or another female student, it would seem out of character...plus, I don\'t like stories that force the characters to age unnaturally. In this case, you can make your protagonist any age you like, without having to potentially mis-characterise a younger canon character.
If I have any criticism at all, it is that the dream sequences are a little difficult to seperate from the rest of the story. At first, this may have been your intention-- to throw the two together, and then have her wake up at the last moment. However, I had a little trouble differentiating between her dreams and reality until I had read a few paragraphs into each segment. I, personally, would find it better if the dream sequences were obvious (the old \"oh, thank god, it was only a dream!\" ending is a little trite these days), but it\'s your story, and up to you.
Snape was excellently written-- perfectly in character for himself. I really loved his smug and sarcastic remarks about her drawing being incorrect, it was a nice touch.
Overall, it was a great story, and I enjoyed it throughout.
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October 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Quite clever & most definately very erotic. Your description of Snape was so dead on that I could see & hear him as I read. Yummy job, keep up the good work.
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October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Amazing. Simply amazing. Couldn\'t stop reading. I felt the words. It made me feel things i forgot i can feel, just vibrate, wow. A caleidoscope made of sensations. And with Snape. What can be better than this? :) Wow.
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September 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a marvelous ending!
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August 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
best snape fanfiction ever!!!!!!
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July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
briliant!
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July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was a magnificient sotry. Snape very recognisable, not all of a sudden talking like a porn actor like in other sexy stories about snape. You can really write and at the same time excite.
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April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ohhhhhhh i love them there the freaking best on to the sqeual away great work keep it up !!