errorYou must be logged in to review this story.
schedule
January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. Thanks.
schedule
January 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God what a cliffhanger! I want to know what happens next :)
I love your fic -- great writing! Thanks!
I love your fic -- great writing! Thanks!
schedule
January 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7...... You really did leave us hanging !!! !!! Malfoy is such a piece of work!!! How many people has he paid off? What\'s going to happen? Can\'t wait to find out!!! Til chapter 8, Deb >^..^<
schedule
December 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
...Do you ever read those stories that stick in your head?
You know, the ones where you\'re out in the real world, wandering up and down the canned goods aisle and comparing the relitive merits between canned corn and canned greenbeans (french cut maybe?) and then you suddenly wonder to yourself weather or not a particular fic has been updated? Then you find yourself trying to imagine where the author is going to take the story? And all thoughts of canned produce are forgotten?
Yeah.
This is one of those stories.
(Look! I\'viewview number 50! How cool is that?)
You know, the ones where you\'re out in the real world, wandering up and down the canned goods aisle and comparing the relitive merits between canned corn and canned greenbeans (french cut maybe?) and then you suddenly wonder to yourself weather or not a particular fic has been updated? Then you find yourself trying to imagine where the author is going to take the story? And all thoughts of canned produce are forgotten?
Yeah.
This is one of those stories.
(Look! I\'viewview number 50! How cool is that?)
schedule
December 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Yes - raw sexual tension - that what we need - more, please?
schedule
December 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Please please post more soon. *Begs* Although the part where Ron had to be 18 for marriage did kinda throw me f loo loop. I\'m gussing you\'re american? Anyhoo, semantics, that doesn\'t matter. The story\'s super good and well written. Awesome job.
Suk
Suk
schedule
December 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow, and did I mention wow. I totally understand why she can\'t accept Ron\'s proposal, it makes sense. She doesn\'t feel as though she belongs in this world, and I don\'t really blame her. After alat hat happened to her, all that she has been through, I know I would want to leave too. So keep up the good work, I can\'t wait to see what\'s next!
schedule
December 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This is very good.
Aside from pnal nal preferance issues (\"Mione\" *grits teeth*), and one instance of repitition (Ginny is Harry\'s girlfriend. She\'s refererred to as such a few times in one paragrah), and one POV change thonfuonfused me for a sec, I can\'t find anything wrong with it. While Ron x Hermione makes me go \"squee,\" I did want a bit more exposition to _show_ it. Some interaction in a previous chapter, and a bit more dialogue would make it even more believeable. These are all very small issues, and took away little from the story.
The portryal of Snape and Hermione\'s inner monologue is great. The situation is handled believeably, which would be diffacult. You can SPELL, God bless you.
The characterisation of and interaction between Snape and Hermione is perfect, and (sweet lord above), IN CHARACTER. So often Snape and Hermione pairings are so warped, they\'re unrecognisable. If you pull it off as a relationship, and it looks like you can, I will forever laud and verneate you.
it was an enjoyable read. You have made a fan. :)
Upadate soon, Please? I want MORE!
Aside from pnal nal preferance issues (\"Mione\" *grits teeth*), and one instance of repitition (Ginny is Harry\'s girlfriend. She\'s refererred to as such a few times in one paragrah), and one POV change thonfuonfused me for a sec, I can\'t find anything wrong with it. While Ron x Hermione makes me go \"squee,\" I did want a bit more exposition to _show_ it. Some interaction in a previous chapter, and a bit more dialogue would make it even more believeable. These are all very small issues, and took away little from the story.
The portryal of Snape and Hermione\'s inner monologue is great. The situation is handled believeably, which would be diffacult. You can SPELL, God bless you.
The characterisation of and interaction between Snape and Hermione is perfect, and (sweet lord above), IN CHARACTER. So often Snape and Hermione pairings are so warped, they\'re unrecognisable. If you pull it off as a relationship, and it looks like you can, I will forever laud and verneate you.
it was an enjoyable read. You have made a fan. :)
Upadate soon, Please? I want MORE!
schedule
December 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Was it just me or did it sound like there was a bit of jelousy coming from Severus? I still feel bad for Ron, he really does mean well & I just know he will be so hurt over her choice!!! Hoping for more soon!!! Deb >^..^<
schedule
December 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I like the way you worked in her feelings for Ron. I think it would make sense, with Ron being a pureblood, that he would be a potential suitor and it also makes sense why she can\'t choose him. Can\'t wait to see how it unfolds.