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for Mercy

by elementaldeity

person jabberwock
schedule February 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It gets more and more interesting. Personally, I\'m hoping to see more of Hermione, Harry, and Ron. I think a friendship between Mercy and Hermione could be interesting.
person Slytherin Secret
schedule January 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like it in First person as it allows insight into Mercy\'s mind, but I also think it would work equally well in third, but that\'s probably because I prefer third person stories; I know that\'s not exceptionally helpful to you, sorry. Great Chapter though. I can\'t wait for the next one so please update soon. Until the next Chapter, Slytherin Secret :o)
person Slytherin Secret
schedule January 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story is great, please update soon. Lucius is so evil though-I\'m curious as to what Mercy is going to do to stop him. And what about her past?! Please give us some more info on that.
person Carr
schedule December 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Absolutely loved this chapter. Kill Lucius! I never much liked the bastard anyway!!
person Dixia
schedule December 18, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Am I still reading??? What a question, Hell yeah!! You really have something very very good here, Mercedes is a wonde cha character and you have made me truly wonder about her story, I also enjoy the way you have been buliding up the plot; even though the story goes alone quite slowly, you have put these little hints there that make me come back every time I notice that you have updated..Truly a good story.

Luv,
Dixia
person Ventrue66
schedule December 14, 2003 at 12:00 AM
A bit of a Disturbed fan? I like your story so far. I am very interested to see what happens next.
person Ventrue66
schedule November 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I like your story. I hope that you intend to make it a lengthy one. It has alot of promise as one of the really good, adventurous stories that a person can really get into.
person Carr
schedule November 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love the story line. I think that we can expect more than a few twists and turns in this, huh? The grammar seems a little rough in a few spots but besides that the only thing i can say is that i want more!! I absolutely loved when Mercy \"dismissed\nsy.nsy. I had a frien who did that kind of thin all the time.
person mistressmalfoy
schedule November 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
good story keep going
person Dixia
schedule November 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad start, not bad at all!!! Keep up writing,
Dixia