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June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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May 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very beautifully and poetically written. Loved it! Please feel free to share any more of your lovely writing with us. I\'ll be looking for it!
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May 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think that you did a FABULOUS job on what you wrote!!! You took a few words & made a very nice & readable story!!! I would LOVE to see what you could do if you went beyond & wrote more chapters!!! Please don\'t get me wrong, I LOVE what you wrote, but with what you did in 1 chapter I can only imagine how WONDERFUL a full story would be!!! Hoping you will write more, Deb >^..^<
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May 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
yes do continue, i am not one for one shots, they should continue on. i would love to see what happens in their life, what things they will encounter. this was a lovely begining to a story. great job & good luck! :)
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November 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I reado ldo like your story, the ending was perfect!!! The only thing that I would ask is that you put a line or 2 oace ace between each paragraph, it would be easier on the eyes. Other than that, I think you did a wonderful job!!! Deb >^..^<
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November 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This was really good. I would love to see more, perhaps from Hermione\'s perspective. Nice insight to Snape...not really something that I have seen in the way you presented it.
Susan
Susan
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November 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful, Just beatiful.
Cathy N :-)
Cathy N :-)
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November 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
well done!
only a few constructive points -- adding an additional line between paragraphs would make it easier to read (not being html-gifted myself, i know that\'s sometimes easier said than done) and you might want to have someone review your punctuation.
a few commas would have made your meaning clearer first time through, but there was nothing awful.
last point, and it\'s a greedy little request, you did such a great job detailing the beginning of their relationship that you really should expand your story to 2 or 3 chapters, expanding their courtship a little more and maybe even into their married years.
you\'ve got a good handle on severus\' pov -- run with it!
nice job.
only a few constructive points -- adding an additional line between paragraphs would make it easier to read (not being html-gifted myself, i know that\'s sometimes easier said than done) and you might want to have someone review your punctuation.
a few commas would have made your meaning clearer first time through, but there was nothing awful.
last point, and it\'s a greedy little request, you did such a great job detailing the beginning of their relationship that you really should expand your story to 2 or 3 chapters, expanding their courtship a little more and maybe even into their married years.
you\'ve got a good handle on severus\' pov -- run with it!
nice job.