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Well, duckie, it all depends on where you really want the story to go. It sounds like you already have plans for the ending if you were able to estimate the chapters you figured it would take to resolve it. Ron\'s is the easiest story to spin off, and it sounds like you\'ve already reached your decision on it. From this point you could make Hermione\'s story go D/Hr or H/Hr. Your fans are going to be split on which pairing they find more interesting anyhow. Some of them are hoping for Hermione to get back to Harry, and some of us want to see where things could go with Draco. Since you can\'t please everyone, you have to go in the direction YOU are most interested in writing. Right now all the characters are very involved in themselves, which allows you to diverge the stories however you want. So that in mind I\'ll throw you some random suggestions to ponder about the characters rather than try to dictate the direction of your story. I\'m not looking for you to answer any of them, but maybe one of them will give you an idea that helps you decide whether you want to split the stories or not.

1. From Harry\'s perspective, what will he need to assuage his insecurities and allow him to feel loved? Could he still feel that with Hermione if he led eed everything that she has been doing? If you do intend to put him back with Hermione what will have to happen to make them both secure enough to handle a relationship with one another, rather than allowing their conflicting prms ams and emotional states to destroy any union between them? Does Harry have a hidden wild side of his own to discover? Does he need a strong person to bring him a sense of stability or will he find a strength inside himself?

2. From Hermione\'s perspective, what is her final goal in this quest for self and sexual exploration? mighmight not consciously have one for herself, but eventually the activities she\'s engaging in must shape her development somehow. Is she unknowingly looking for a man who is going to be strong and in control of their relationship? Will she develop a taste for control instead? Does she need a certain degree of recklessness in potential partners after these wild liasons? Will she decide that she wants something tamer? Will she develop feelings for anyone that either draw her further into this arrangement or lead her away from it? Other than her self-respect, is this arrangement affecting her respect for any of those around her?

3. From Draco\'s point of view, is Hermione the only one who is entranced by the taboo of their activities toer? er? Does Draco gain anything in particular from his arrangement with Hermione other than merely getting off? Will Draco gain some respect for Hermione? Will Draco become disgusted with her need for debasement? Does Draco have any hidden needs fbasebasement or being out of control? Would anything make Draco a bit less of an SOB? Would something make him more of one? Does Draco have any insecurities or wants that are going to affect this arrangement?

If you want to keep a Harry/Hermione/Draco triangle, I\'d keep the story lines together. If you feel that you have more interest in giving Harry a story and journey of his own, then by all means split them. I don\'t know if any of my play questions will help spark anything for you; but I\'ve got full confidence that, however you continue, the stories will be excellent.

My vote is that you split it into two....Being a H/Hr shipper, I\'d like to see the end result being between the two. I like the idea of splitting Ron\'s end off onto a separate arc though now that he and Harry aren\'t in conflict anymore.

i think if your breaking it up then have harry have a part on his own. Let Hermione do her thing with Draco and Ron do his thing with all the others. While Ron is geg pog popular Harry is the boy who lived so he should be sought after at least as much as Ron. Maybe have him start dating someone like Parvarti or one of the Hufflepuff girls or maybe even a slytherin maybe a female Blaise Zambini or something like that. Harry is more a relationship type but that doesnt mean he cant have multiple relationships after the one he is in doesnt work out. You could also put Hermione seperate and Harry and Rons stories together and make a competition out of it between Harry and Ron on who can hook up with more people. That would be an interesting story as they make their way through the hogwarts rank and files. Maybe even extra points for female teachers. Just a thought but it would be an interesting read and keep the stories at 2, one hermione the other harry vs ron for king player of hogwarts.

I think you are onto a great idea with the Harry and Hermoine thing. While Harry is looking for love in a way so is Hermoine whether or not she realize this or even believe she deserves to be love. Maybe that why she finds pure ure in someone abusing her. I mean she did question her self once abut it. Maybe you can tie that concept in where each of them is seeking the same thing then come to the realization that what they are seeking might be discovered with each other. Maybe Harry first giving her what she want the way she wants it but eventually teaches her how it can be. Just an idea. However which way you take it this is a challenge but I think you can do it. h/hr forever

C\'mon Duckie, don\'t give up. Y. You can wrap this up in a few chapters without doing major damage to the story. I don\'t think you have to worry about the Ron issue - I don\'t see it as an integral part of the story. You can just let it lie and pick it up in another story. The only thing that will cause a problem is dealing with the Voldemort issue. My suggestion would be to just take it out of the story, then you won\'t have to deal with it. If I remember correctly you only brought it up in one chapter, when Harry had his dream. Should be easy enough to cut out. As to continuing the story, if you don\'t want it to go on forever all you have to do is get out of the middle. Wrap up the Hermoine/Draco thing tonight by having him do something so disgusting even Hermoine can\'t continue with this \"experimentation\" (although I can\'t imagine anything more debasing than licking semen off a dirtyor).or). Have Hermoine reconcile with Harry and Ron. Have her confess to Harry about her experimentation with the Imperius curse. She doesn\'t have to go into all the details. Draco can\'t say anything or he\'ll end up in Azkaban. As far as I can gather, someone allowing one to do the curse doesn\'t excuse doing it. I would then have Harry beat the shit out of Draco, but that\'s just me. A couple of chapters should be enough to have Harry and Ron forgive her - you have a fertile imagination, I\'m sure you can work out a believable scenario. One more scene where Harry and Hermoine fall in love and have beautiful loving sex and voila! I don\'t have your imagination or writing skills so I could never pull this off, but I know you can. This may not be the way you want to go, but you did ask for suggestions. Thanks for everything so far - please don\'t give it up!

I must say that I really like this story. I can see spliting Ron\'s story off. As for Harry and Hermione, I guess it depends on how you want this to end....is Harry going to find out what Hermione\'s doing, they fight, then make up/fall in love? or are they never going to have a romantic relationship? If they\'re never going to get together again, then split it. If they will get together, then keep it together. I hope this makes sense. Please write more soon.

Hi, I was just wondering if the reason you are really splitting the stories up is because of what Mirta wrote. It looks to me like she is a jealous 12 year old. I was just wondering. I fully understand the whole story, and I\'m enjoying it very much, but if you want to spilt them I\'m cool with it. I think Draco is getting fluffy on hermione, and it would be interesting if harry found them doing something Naughty! lol :}

I feel like they should be turned into three stories. It\'ll be really messy if Harry ends up dealing with the whole Draco/Hermione thing, and I\'d actually like to see her deal with it on her own. Take as long as you need; I hope you get things figured out.

I don\'t know what to tell you. I never advise an author to go against the flow of their own story. However Rons exploits are of the least importance in this fic so if you take them out to shorten it that would be fine. You write marvellously and I would hate to see this fic stop. Take your time order your thoughts and let the story carry you through.