rate_review Reviews

I tried to read this, but it's so utterly full of grammar mistakes that it's impossible to get through more than a paragraph before getting a headache. If your first language is not English, I guess I understand, but it's not that difficult to find a beta reader to edit your work, especially on fanfiction websites. If your first language is English, well then either you are not over the age of 18..because no one 18 and older could make mistakes as horrendous as the ones that I see in this fic, or you really need to go back to school.

It's unfortunate, because the idea of the story has merit. I just can't read it because it's so grammatically messed up.

You have a nasty habit of ending chapters at inopportune moments. How so, can you? This is sadism!!! Fortunately, the story is complete and I do not have to wait for subsequent chapters. I'd probably an entire manicure to the elbow ate.

'Melting milk chocolate with whole nuts and almonds caramelized.'
Elehyn I love you (actually I begin to praise you like I have to raise the floor xD)

'Along the way, Harry heard Ron whispering repeatedly, something that sounded like, "I saw Snape naked. I saw Snape naked".'
You are cruel! You Rona exposed to such trauma (and me abdominal pain).

The last part surprised me. You did not explain how Harry and Snape have solved your problem. You once gave a brief final scene. What a pity. How would you embody several paragraphs from the whole story.
The end crowns the work. Your work (no doubt excellent) could be a masterpiece ...

that last bit was a surprise! please write again soon, i really like your work! *kisses*

Just so you know the site seems to be eating some of the words in your story. Either that or the typo monster has attacked you. This story is so good I'm really enjoying it so far and am almost done I hope you write more stories in English soon.

You are one of the best writters I have seen in this entire section. Your story is amazing, as well as the plot. You stroy flows and you end the story at the right point. Most stories I've read prolong the ending and add in unnecassary tidbits that are just for their amusement. I could not just read one chapter and be content. I am suprised though that it took such a turn, it was brilliant though. ( When Harry decided to seduce Severus) I am an immence fan of Severus Snape x Harry Potter and this story quenched my thirst. If you ever do need a beta for any story that you are editing, then just email me. ( Though I would prefer it to be malexmale, I am open to malexfemale. It would also help if I knew the Category {Harry Potter/ Naruto/ etc...}) Please do start another and I will be a devoted fan.

Great fic. did like it a lot

This was so beautiful! But if you're french, why didn't you make Sev murmer in French to Harry?

It was a real "page turner" at the end. Very good. Nice combo of fluff and everything else. Great story.

Thanks for the story!!!
I enjoyed it, especially that speach from Ron to Harry about being his best friend and brother.

Awww!!! that so sweet! <3 <3